Talk:Imran Khan (film actor)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: IndianBio (talk · contribs) 13:25, 26 March 2013 (UTC)

I missed the chance for the Peer review :( but I will surely help you with the GA review. — Indian: BIO  · [ ChitChat  ] 13:25, 26 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Thanks! :) Gleek Vampire  &#124;  talk!  13:41, 26 March 2013 (UTC)


 * External links
 * Let's start with some problematic External links as per teh tool. Correct them. — Indian: BIO  · [ ChitChat  ] 13:58, 29 March 2013 (UTC)
 * ✅ The India Today links aren't dead. — Gleek Vampire  &#124;  talk!  20:26, 30 March 2013 (UTC)


 * Lead
 * director and producer or director-producer?


 * He then starred in I Hate Luv Storys (2010), Delhi Belly (2011), Mere Brother Ki Dulhan (2011) and Ek Main Aur Ekk Tu (2012), all of which were commercially successful. --> This makes it sound like these were the only movies he starred which is not. So rephrase it like "He then starred in a number of commercially successful films like I Hate Luv Storys (2010), Delhi Belly (2011), Mere Brother Ki Dulhan (2011) and Ek Main Aur Ekk Tu (2012)."


 * I think the lead can be extended a little more. At present seeing the content of the article body the lead can definitely bulked up
 * What else can I add? (I'm not very good with leads) :P


 * Early life
 * again, director-producer?


 * Khan was educated at Bombay Scottish School, where he developed a bad stammer due to corporal punishments such as caning --> Use He instead of Khan
 * (Short note, I loved reading about his childhood and the Gurukul) :)
 * ✅ & thanks!! :)


 * Khan then moved to Sunnyvale, California, where he lived with his father and attended Fremont High School --> A mention of the year would be beneficial to put the timeline into perspective.
 * Couldn't find the exact year. However, an article does mention that he moved there "during his late teens". Should I add that?


 * I think the portion from him returning to India to the film role should move into the Acting career section
 * Shouldn't the Kishore Namit acting institute part stay in the early life section? — Gleek Vampire  &#124;  talk!  12:16, 6 April 2013 (UTC)
 * Well I would say no. Khan being an actor, and that he enrolled into an acting school and prepared himself as an actor is definitely a beginning of his acting career and especially from the part where he bagged the role in Jaane Tu. — Indian: BIO  · [ ChitChat  ] 06:00, 7 April 2013 (UTC)
 * ✅ - However, none of the sources have mentioned the exact year he returned to India. — Gleek Vampire  &#124;  talk!  02:14, 12 April 2013 (UTC)

Will continue later. — Indian: BIO  · [ ChitChat  ] 07:51, 6 April 2013 (UTC)


 * Debut
 * Khan made his debut in 2008 with Abbas Tyrewala's romantic comedy --> just use Tyrewala


 * Khan was nominated for --> Directly write "Khan won the award for Best Male Debut at the 54th Filmfare Awards, sharing the trophy with Farhan Akhtar".


 * Gaurav Malani of Indiatimes observed --> The article was published in The Economic Times, not Indiatimes


 * Luck alongside Sanjay Dutt, Mithun Chakraborty and Shruti Haasan --> Luck alongside Dutt, Mithun Chakraborty and Shruti Haasan
 * ✅ - Removed individual cast names; wrote "ensemble cast" instead


 * The critical reviews for Luck, why not write them in your own words, there is excessive WP:QUOTEFARM in the section.
 * And combine the Kidnap and Luck paras together since that would be coherent.
 * ✅ - Combined the I Hate Luv Storys and Break Ke Baad paras instead; both films released in the same year.


 * The I Hate Luv Storys receptions. Since you say it was generally well-received, that denotes that a negative reception was embedded somewhere. It would be better if you can topple up the two positive reviews with a little criticism.


 * Another thing, wherever you are not mentioning anything about the opposite lead role actor, I don't think its worth the mention.
 * ✅ - Removed Luck cast, Sonam Kapoor (IHLS) and Deepika Padukone (BKB)


 * The image used in the section, does not add anything for the encyclopedia, albeit being a free image. Why don't add something from the Jaane Tu.. premiere with the photo of the cast? That way you can add a little more commentary. Check Priyanka Chopra and how the image for 7 Khoon Maaf premiere is added.


 * Also, I saw mainly whatever is a critical perspective. Where are Khan's thoughts, quotes and inspirations for the roles etc? This will be valid for the next section also.
 * ✅ — Gleek Vampire  &#124;  talk!  02:20, 12 April 2013 (UTC)


 * Success
 * Delhi Belly, first black comedy by Imran, definite case of needing something from the actor's perspective.


 * Khan played Kush Agnihotri, a man who falls in love with his brother's bride --> Khan played Kush Agnihotri, a man who falls in love with his brother's bride, played by Zafar and Kaif, respectively.


 * Can you vary the prose tone of each of the film paras? Basically they have the same block structure "Starred in XX film opposite YY, mixed/positive/negative reception but was worldwide flop/success... followed by two critic quotes" Makes a really dull read.


 * The para about Ek Main Aur EkTu is the exact thing I want throughout the article scattered. Khan's idea and perspective comes through here.
 * WP:QUOTEFARM applies heavily to this section
 * ✅ - Removed 2 review quotes.


 * Lisa Tsering's critic is not catering to this film, its overall perspective of Khan's emrgence as a light-hearted comedy actor. Find a different review.


 * Khan began 2013 by starring in Vishal Bhardwaj's Matru Ki Bijlee Ka Mandola, ---> Start differently "Following ''Ek Main..., Khan starred in  Vishal Bhardwaj's Matru Ki Bijlee Ka Mandola (2013), "


 * The film was a box office failure;[45][46] it (and Khan's performance) received mixed reviews from critics ---> Wrong construction, rephrase


 * Reuters, not Reuters
 * ✅ — Gleek Vampire  &#124;  talk!  02:48, 12 April 2013 (UTC)


 * Other ventures
 * Give a one-liner about what's The Vagina Monologues
 * entitled --> titled
 * That quote starting from "I care about animals.." put it in a "" template
 * Can we get a little more info about the endorsements? Like did he promote them through ads, or came in print media, or went on a tour etc.


 * Personal
 * said of them --> said of them:
 * He retained his mother's second name in tribute because she, a single parent, raised him on her own --> Rephrase the construction
 * at age 19—according to him --> That should be a en-dash, not em-dash
 * Khan's uncontroversial, quiet lifestyle ---> non-controversial


 * Image
 * This section is pretty good and well done.
 * Thanks! :)


 * Others
 * Use WP:ACCESS on the filmography table
 * ✅ — Gleek Vampire  &#124;  talk!  02:56, 12 April 2013 (UTC)

On hold for 7 days. Good work Gleek Vampire. — Indian: BIO  · [ ChitChat  ] 06:00, 7 April 2013 (UTC)


 * Good job, passing the article. — Indian: BIO  · [ ChitChat  ] 05:43, 12 April 2013 (UTC)