Talk:In Decay/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 21:22, 12 January 2021 (UTC)

I will start to review this tomorrow, though it will not be a quick fail like "I Still See Your Face" for sure. --K. Peake 21:22, 12 January 2021 (UTC)
 * Thank you for your interest in reviewing. Just want to note that, even though I nominated the article, all credit goes to EditorE, he developed the article. I believe this meets the GA criteria, so I nominated it. Of course, if there are any problems, I will fix them. GhostP.   talk  23:00, 12 January 2021 (UTC)
 * Good article nominations/Instructions says, "Articles may be nominated by anyone, though it is highly preferable that they have contributed significantly to the article and are familiar with the subject." but that is not a guarantee and you are not that experienced with under 500 edits, so I will still review this GAN. Bare what I said in mind for the future though, as you will be expected to significantly contribute to GANs once you've got more experience. --K. Peake 07:51, 13 January 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Change genre to Electropop since that is sourced in the body, unlike synthwave
 * Wikilink Com Truise under producer(s)
 * The stylization should be sourced somewhere in the body; a mention in the opening section would be ideal
 * The source is the album's own cover, I don't think any secondary source noted that the album is styled as "in decay." The album is officially known as "In Decay" on Spotify & other streaming services anyway, without using the stylized form, so I ✅ this sentence. GhostP.   talk  11:31, 13 January 2021 (UTC)
 * Remove wikilink on electronic musician and target electronic to Electronic music
 * Wikilink independent record label
 * "The record is a collection" → "It is a collection"
 * "before its release," → "prior to the release,"
 * "internet mixtape series Komputer Kasts" → "internet mixtape series, Komputer Kasts,"
 * "before the release of" → "before the release of his debut EP,"
 * "to define the Com Truise project." → "to define Com Truise."
 * "upon release was mixed overall;" → "upon release was mixed;"
 * "while a frequent criticism was its repetition and" → "while frequent criticisms were its repetition, and" since you have listed out more than one critcism
 * The second paragraph is only one sentence, so move that to the end of the opening para
 * "A second such compilation album," → "A follow-up compilation album,"
 * Remove wikilink on In Decay, Too
 * All ✅. GhostP.   talk  11:31, 13 January 2021 (UTC)

Background and release

 * "of his demos and tracks" the "demos" part is not sourced
 * Removed. GhostP.   talk  11:31, 13 January 2021 (UTC)
 * "With "Open" released as the lead single of" → "After "Open" was released as the lead single from"
 * Fixed. GhostP.   talk  11:31, 13 January 2021 (UTC)

Content

 * "mastered for this LP by Haley." → "they were mastered for the album by Haley." with the target
 * "of Cyanide Sisters (2010)," → "of the project's debut EP Cyanide Sisters (2010),"
 * "structure consisting of" → "structure that consists of"
 * Wikilink synthesizers
 * "tough bass sounds and" → "tough bass sounds, and"
 * Wikilink science fiction
 * "that was on Com Truise's previous" → "as Com Truise's previous"
 * "In fact, some reviewers have described the songs on the LP" → "Some reviewers have described the songs on the album"
 * Target lo-fi to Lo-fi music
 * [7] should solely be after the second comma
 * "of the past records." → "of the project's past records."
 * "Ghostly's press release explains" → "Ghostly's press release explained" with the wikilink
 * "is a document of Haley exploring parts" → "features Haley exploring parts"
 * Target 8-bit to Chiptune
 * Target slow-tempo to Tempo
 * Target dance to Dance music
 * Target psychedelic to Psychedelic music
 * "from what normally comes from the Com Truise project;" → "from the normal output of the Com Truise project;" to be less wordy
 * Wikilink bass guitar
 * "snares" "give him" → "snares" manage to "give him" with the target
 * All errors noted above were ✅. GhostP.   talk  11:31, 13 January 2021 (UTC)

Critical reception

 * Allmusic → AllMusic
 * Prefix → Prefix Mag
 * Tiny Mix Tapes should be italicised
 * "received mixed reviews from critics." → "was met with mixed reviews from music critics." with the target
 * CMJ should not be italicised
 * "and ultimately concluded that" → "and concluded that"
 * "proper sophomore album"." → "proper sophomore album."" for consistency
 * "Com Truise's past distributed records." → "Com Truise's past releases."
 * "A Prefix critic wrote" → "A Prefix Mag critic wrote"
 * "that the LP's charm was the" → "that the compilation's charm is the"
 * Wikilink Negativland
 * Wikilink DJ Shadow
 * Target IDM to Intelligent dance music
 * "One of his criticisms was the" → "He was critical of the"
 * "to sequencing" which" → "to sequencing," which"
 * "“Dreambender,” “Klymaxx,” and “Yxes.”" → ""Dreambender", "Klymaxx", and "Yxes"."
 * "in In Decay's mixed reviews was the LP's" → "in mixed reviews of In Decay was its"
 * "he called issuing a rarities compilation so early in the project's career a" → "issuing a rarities compilation so early in Truise's career is a"
 * "He also disliked" → "Kivel also disliked"
 * "writing that it" → "opining that it"
 * Target looped to Loop (music)
 * Target sample to Sampling (music)
 * "who called the LP's songs" → "who called the album's songs"
 * "and "baubles, pure" → "said it "baubles, pure"
 * Wikilink synthpop
 * All errors were ✅. GhostP.   talk  11:31, 13 January 2021 (UTC)

Track listing

 * Songwriting, production and album artwork by Seth Haley. → All songs written and produced by Seth Haley. with the wikilink; artwork is not relevant to this section
 * Fixed. GhostP.   talk  11:31, 13 January 2021 (UTC)

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed; good luck with fixing them, even if you are not as knowledgeable as the editor that expanded this article! --K. Peake 09:47, 13 January 2021 (UTC)
 * Thank you for reviewing! All errors pointed by you were fixed. GhostP.   talk  11:31, 13 January 2021 (UTC)
 * Looks good, apart from you having not changed the genre in the infobox, removed the italicisation on AllMusic in the body and removed the second wikilink on Stereogum. --K. Peake 12:59, 13 January 2021 (UTC)
 * Oops, forgot to fix those. Done. GhostP.   talk  14:17, 13 January 2021 (UTC)
 * Just fixed two issues with ref 1 that I forgot to point out as still not being fixed, after my previous suggestions. ✅ now, kudos for getting through this quickly! --K. Peake 14:22, 13 January 2021 (UTC)