Talk:In the Company of a Poet/GA1

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Reviewer: Kavyansh.Singh (talk · contribs) 04:08, 3 January 2022 (UTC) Nominator: Nicholas Michael Halim (talk · contribs) at 08:19, 26 August 2021 (UTC)

Prose
@ – I'll stop here and continue with it later. We could really get some dedicated copy-editing. – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 09:18, 3 January 2022 (UTC)
 * containing her extensive interview — I'd remove 'extensive'
 * with the Indian filmmaker, lyricist, and poet Gulzar. — suggesting "with Gulzar, an Indian filmmaker, lyricist, and poet."
 * Dina, British India (now Pakistan) — missing MOS:GEOCOMMA (both in the lead and in the prose)
 * "Top 10 in Indian Non-fiction Books" — I'd remove the quotes
 * and the journalist — remove 'the'
 * lyricist, poet and screenwriter — comma after 'poet'
 * "Summary" — Shouldn't the title be "Synopsis". I am not sure, though.
 * into a Sikh family — "in a Sikh family"
 * "now Pakistan" in lead v. "(present-day Pakistan)" in prose. — suggesting to be consistent.
 * and had married for three times (producing a son and two daughters from a first marriage with Raaj) — remove 'for', and replace 'producing' with 'having'
 * who later become — "who later became"
 * Gulzar says to Kabir — convert to past tense
 * as his mother was died — remove 'was'
 * after giving birth to him — as we have mentioned that Gulzar is the only child, 'to him' could be removed.
 * how he wrote his first poet — first poet?
 * when he was at the age of ten — should be "at age ten"
 * and later starts — "and later started"
 * Gulzar married to the actress — remove 'to the'
 * I know that summary/synopsis usually doesn't require a citation, but as most all of this is Gulzar's biography, can we get a source at the end verifying everything? Upto you though.
 * Movie Mahal — Is 'Movie' part of the title? If not, it should not be in italics.
 * "Nasreen Munni Kabir" is repeated many times. Can just write "Kabir" for her.
 * Nasreen Munni Kabir asked for help from the journalist Khalid Mohamed to invite people who had significantly involved in the industry. — Odd wording. Specify: which indistry? "who had significantly involved in the" is missing "been". Also, who are characterized as being "significantly" involved? What is significant?
 * on Pali Hill — specify the city.
 * this time on — remove 'this time'
 * the playback singer — I'd remove 'the'
 * Kabir recounted he came up insightful information about the singer — odd phrasing. Who is "he" here? Also, it is missing a few words.
 * Done. —Nicholas Michael Halim (talk) 09:31, 3 January 2022 (UTC)


 * from their previous rendezvous — rephrase 'rendezvous'
 * "[preposterously] as this might sound", "no matter how overly dramatic the whole might seem to him" — we will need citations immediately after these quotes
 * once more after she arriving in India. — replace "arriving" with "arrives"
 * In the end of 2010, — "In late 2010,"
 * so they avoid — start as a new sentence, and remove 'so'
 * "I also believed that even if we were to revisit events that were already known, [Gulzar] would shed new light on them from the perspective of who he is today." — we will need citations immediately after the quote
 * at his office — specify Gulzar
 * "If you haven't read any of the books centered on Gulzar yet, this one—though not the best of the lot—could still be your pick!" — we will need citations immediately after the quote
 * The Hindustan Times' Deepa Gahlot — "The Hindustan Times' journalist(??) Deepa Gahlot "
 * "flips from films to individuals without a pause, from people to poetry with the finesse of a trapeze artiste" — we will need citations immediately after the quote
 * The table needs a caption, preferably using the template.

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