Talk:Infinity (Mariah Carey song)/GA1

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Reviewer: CurtisNaito (talk · contribs) 10:58, 16 August 2015 (UTC)

I will handle this review fairly soon.CurtisNaito (talk) 19:55, 25 August 2015 (UTC)


 * @Calvin999Not a lot of problems with this article. However, I do recommend the following copy edits.


 * "album/thirteenth studio album"=I don't think a backslash should be used in formal writing. Replace the backslash with the word "and".
 * "It is an R&B song; the lyrics are about Carey putting herself first and emancipation, however many critics likened the content to the singer's separation from Nick Cannon."=This could be considered a run-on sentence. Try putting a period after "emancipation".
 * "Critical response to "Infinity" was positive, with Carey's vocals and humorous songwriting praised, with particular emphasis on the reference to Fritos."= I lean towards making "with particular emphasis on the reference to Fritos" a separate sentence.
 * "filmed during on of Carey's"="one of Carey's"
 * "a distinctly unromantic a kiss-off anthem"=The source cited does not include the first "a"
 * "highlighted a the juxtaposition between"=delete the word "a"
 * "appeared to referring to their"="appeared to be referring"
 * "and continuation to co-parent their twins"=The word choice seems clunky here. Perhaps try "and ongoing co-parenting of"
 * "When asked if the lyrics were about her relationship with Cannon by Liz Hernandez"=Change this sentence from passive voice to active voice.
 * "feel, Carey's vocals and songwriting"="Carey's vocals and songwriting" is like a single item, so I think you should put "and" or "as well as" after "feel".
 * "Billboard were complimentary"="Billboard was complimentary"
 * "come accustom to hearing"="come to grow accustomed to hearing"
 * "whilst notes"="whistle notes"
 * "suffering from Bronchitis prior to"=There is no need to capitalize bronchitis here.
 * "Credits adapted from the liner notes of"=Since this is a normal non-bulleted sentence ending with a period, I think it should be a full sentence reading "The following credits were adapted from".CurtisNaito (talk) 17:14, 26 August 2015 (UTC)
 * Thanks. i've amended everything. — Calvin999  17:05, 27 August 2015 (UTC)
 * "whilstle"="whistle"
 * "appeared to referring to their"="appeared to be referring"
 * "highlighted a the juxtaposition between"=delete the word "a"
 * a "distinctly unromantic a kiss-off anthem"=This sentence is still grammatically wrong. How about saying that it was called "distinctly unromantic" and "a kiss-off anthem".
 * Good idea. — Calvin999  17:27, 27 August 2015 (UTC)
 * "Critical response to "Infinity" was positive, with Carey's vocals and humorous songwriting praised, with particular emphasis on the reference to Fritos."= I lean towards making "with particular emphasis on the reference to Fritos" a separate sentence.CurtisNaito (talk) 17:15, 27 August 2015 (UTC)
 * Done all — Calvin999  17:27, 27 August 2015 (UTC)
 * Okay, I will pass this.CurtisNaito (talk) 18:29, 27 August 2015 (UTC)
 * Thank you — Calvin999  18:29, 27 August 2015 (UTC)