Talk:Inspired (song)/GA1

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 23:08, 5 September 2018 (UTC)

Lead

 * during her 2016 presidential campaign. It also includes → during her 2016 presidential campaign, and also includes (for better flow; avoid clipped sentences)
 * Revised, with a slightly different wording. Aoba47 (talk) 19:50, 6 September 2018 (UTC)


 * Although the release date usually doesn't come that late in most of the GAs I've seen, I see why you did it like that and it's okay
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 19:50, 6 September 2018 (UTC)


 * The singer's fans created a lyric video → A lyric video was created by the singer's fans (to avoid the repetition of "The" at the beginning of the sentence)
 * Revised with slightly different wording. Aoba47 (talk) 19:50, 6 September 2018 (UTC)


 * Link "Critical" to Music criticism
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 19:50, 6 September 2018 (UTC)

Infobox

 * ALT > There is a circle filled in by a horizontal rainbow strips. The letters "M C" and "Inspired" are included in the circle in a black font. → There is also a circle filled in by (no a here) horizontal rainbow strips, including the latters "M C" and the word "Inspired" in black font. (to avoid clipped sentences)
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 19:50, 6 September 2018 (UTC)

Recording and release

 * with assistance from Mark Ralston. Doron Dina was the → You may link the sentence with "while" to give it a better flow, but it's up to you
 * I do not think that "while" would make sense in this context. Aoba47 (talk) 19:50, 6 September 2018 (UTC)


 * It was a promotional single from her sixth studio album Younger Now (2017). → please include this bit in the June 9, 2017 release sentence (...on June 9, 2017, as a promotional single...)
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 19:50, 6 September 2018 (UTC)


 * "Inspired" was the second song released from the album; the first being "Malibu" → Put this bit directly after the June 9, 2017 release sentence.
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 19:50, 6 September 2018 (UTC)


 * the second song released from the album; the first being "Malibu" → the second release from the album after "Malibu" (saying "song" here may be wrong, because it was released as a single)
 * It was the second song in general released from the album. Aoba47 (talk) 19:50, 6 September 2018 (UTC)


 * Cyrus donated the profits → It may be better to say "the song's profits", so it is clear which profits are meant.
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 19:50, 6 September 2018 (UTC)

Composition and lyrics

 * 04 beats per minute "with inspiration" → I don't exaclty know what you mean here with "with inspiration", and the source also does not further explain the term
 * I am not exactly sure what it means either, but I think it is important to include. Aoba47 (talk) 19:50, 6 September 2018 (UTC)


 * Instrumentation is provided by a piano, a fiddle, and chords → This is not all the instruments that were played for the song; please complete with the rest of the instruments played according to the album's credits
 * I have removed the sentence. Aoba47 (talk) 19:50, 6 September 2018 (UTC)


 * fiddle-prone ballad".[19] Norris wrote that → Link these two sentences with "while" for a better flow.
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 19:50, 6 September 2018 (UTC)


 * Inspired by her experience being caught → Inspired by her experience of being caught
 * The suggestion is not grammatically correct. Aoba47 (talk) 19:50, 6 September 2018 (UTC)


 * Funeral procession → I know there is a Wikipedia article linked, but could you explain the term to me? I just don't get what is is...
 * A funeral procession refers to the cars that drive to the cemetery/church during a funeral (i.e. the hearse and the family/friends). Aoba47 (talk) 19:50, 6 September 2018 (UTC)


 * lyrics (“We are meant for more/ With a handle on the door/ That opens up for change”) were → no need for the paranthesis
 * I think that the parenthesis are needed in this context. Aoba47 (talk) 19:50, 6 September 2018 (UTC)


 * celebrate Hilary Clinton winning → mention only her last name
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 19:50, 6 September 2018 (UTC)


 * with Cyrus' concerns for the environment → Isn't it about the environment?
 * "For" makes sense in this context. Aoba47 (talk) 19:50, 6 September 2018 (UTC)


 * Please link Clinton in the image and shortly mention what her job is
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 19:50, 6 September 2018 (UTC)

Reception

 * and wrote that Halsey's duet with Lauren Jauregui for the 2017 single "Strangers" as the superior LGBT anthem → and classified Halsey's duet with Lauren Jauregui for the 2017 single "Strangers" as the superior LGBT anthem
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 19:50, 6 September 2018 (UTC)


 * Not a huge fan of one-line paragraphs, but it's up to you
 * Same, but I am not sure where to put it. It would not make sense to combine it with the other paragraphs. Aoba47 (talk) 19:50, 6 September 2018 (UTC)


 * To have a smoother transition between the critical and commercial reception of the song, I would advise you to reword to: "Commercially, 'Inspired' peaked..."
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 19:50, 6 September 2018 (UTC)

Live performances

 * Cyrus promoted the track through live performances → I would say "several", as there really were several live performances
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 19:50, 6 September 2018 (UTC)


 * Washington, D.C. pride festival. She was the headliner for the event → Washington, D.C. pride festival, where she was the headliner for the event
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 19:50, 6 September 2018 (UTC)


 * she did "Inspired" and "Malibu" → I would advise you to repeat yourself with "performed" rather than using "did". It somehow sounds unencyclopedic in this context
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 19:50, 6 September 2018 (UTC)


 * iHeartMedia.[18][38] She dedicated the performance → iHeartMedia,[18][38] and dedicated the performance (to avoid clipped sentences)
 * Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 19:50, 6 September 2018 (UTC)

Copy-violation

 * 27.0% is acceptable!
 * Thank you! Aoba47 (talk) 19:50, 6 September 2018 (UTC)

Outcome

 * — Great work with this article! Once my comments are adressed, I think it's good to go. Best regards; Cartoon network freak (talk) 18:02, 6 September 2018 (UTC)
 * Thank you for the review! I greatly appreciate your help. Please let me know if you need help with anything. Aoba47 (talk) 19:50, 6 September 2018 (UTC)
 * As I agree with your responses to my comments, I am now passing this wonderful article to GA. Btw, I love how you write articles on many topics on Wikipedia (films, characters, music...). Good job! I have also nominated this article for GAN, but since it is a bit longer, you may prefer this shorter one... only if you've got time. Best regards; Cartoon network freak (talk) 20:29, 6 September 2018 (UTC)