Talk:Instant Replay Game/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Harper J. Cole (talk · contribs) 20:26, 11 November 2022 (UTC)

I'll take on this review... Harper J. Cole (talk) 20:26, 11 November 2022 (UTC)

Picture

 * A lot of NFL game articles have pictures of the stadium (e.g. Clock Play, No Punt Game, Freezer Bowl. Probably worth adding in a Lambeau field picture for consistency.

Harper J. Cole (talk) 20:32, 11 November 2022 (UTC)

Lede

 * ... Here "4th-down" should be hyphenated, as it modifies a noun.


 * ... This phrase is repeated; you can just say "He" the second time.


 * ... No need for the apostrophe.

Harper J. Cole (talk) 21:10, 11 November 2022 (UTC)

Background

 * ... It was the 1985 season when they won it. I'd also suggest the more specific "at the end of" rather than "during".


 * ... I'd replace "were" with "are" both times, as this is still the case today. Then begin the next sentence with "In 1989, their first match-up was scheduled..."

Harper J. Cole (talk) 21:25, 11 November 2022 (UTC)

Game summary

 * ... Fullback is all one word.


 * ... Here "back and forth" isn't hyphenated, as it's not describing anything else (e.g. "a back-and-forth game" would be hyphenated).


 * ... Again, no need for the possessive apostrophe.


 * ... Two consecutive sentences beginning with "The Packers"; the second one can begin simply "They".


 * ... Typically the Center is the one said to have snapped the ball; I suggest "received the snap".


 * ... I'd suggest blue-linking line of scrimmage, as it's a central component of this play.


 * ... Also blue link Sterling Sharpe, as it's the first time he's mentioned in the body of the article.


 * ... Typo.


 * Unless there's a particular convention to the contrary for these inset boxes, I'd expect quote marks around this bit.

Harper J. Cole (talk) 00:15, 12 November 2022 (UTC)

Boxscore

 * The title should be box score with a space, I think.


 * ... Again, a space is needed in "box score". Also, no need to capitalize "starting lineups", and Pro-Football-Reference.com can be blue-linked.


 * Box scores usually have drive details where available (e.g. the current Packers season. You can add those from this source.

Harper J. Cole (talk) 14:30, 12 November 2022 (UTC)

Impact

 * ... Typo.


 * ... "Miraculous" seems a bit hyperbolic for an encyclopedia.


 * ... No comma after "four".


 * ... No apostrophe.

Harper J. Cole (talk) 15:24, 12 November 2022 (UTC)

Legacy

 * ... Remove the second hyphen.


 * ... Based on the citation, it looks like it was changed so that only the quarterback's position was relevant, with the ball not mattering any longer.


 * ... This wording makes it a bit unclear whether Ditka was Chicago's head coach in 1989 or in 2014.

Harper J. Cole (talk) 15:39, 12 November 2022 (UTC)

Conclusion
A well-written article, just needing a few adjustments to pass.

Harper J. Cole (talk) 15:43, 12 November 2022 (UTC)
 * , thanks for the thorough review! I believe I have addressed all your comments in these edits. Let me know if you have any questions or additional comments. « Gonzo fan2007  (talk)  @ 20:45, 12 November 2022 (UTC)
 * Looking good! I've promoted. Nice work on the article. Harper J. Cole (talk) 23:33, 12 November 2022 (UTC)