Talk:International Aviation Meet at Belmont Park/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Amitchell125 (talk · contribs) 18:47, 26 February 2024 (UTC)

Happy to review this article for you. AM

Lead section/infobox

 * The lead needs to be expanded so that it is a better summary of the main text (see MOS:INTRO).✅
 * Link aerial show (presumably Air show); altitude.	✅
 * Link Belmont Park in the infobox caption.	✅
 * The infobox and main text of the article says tournament, but the lead says aerial show. The main text also calls it a meet. I would be more consistent here.✅ attempted to use standardize usage

Background

 * Is the Aero Club Corporation the same as the Aero Club of America? If so, it can be linked. ✅
 * The significance of the Wright Company may not be obvious to all readers, and so should be briefly explained.✅
 * Why is "electric light" in quotes?	(removed) ✅
 * Link grandstand; Jacques Faure (Jacques Faure (aviator)). linked grandstand, added link to Fr wiki, but not sure I did it right
 * at Belmont Park is redundant text and can be removed.✅

History

 * Link Alfred Leblanc; John Moisant altitude (as in the lead).✅
 * the nine day (October 22–31, 1910) event – can be simplified to remove duplicate information, as the event clearly took place over 9 days.	✅
 * Scientific American is linked, but not Statue of Liberty?	✅
 * they sued the Aero Corporation over payments… this seems to be in the wrong part of the article, chronologically speaking. Did they sue the company before the races took place, as could to be implied here?	moved the paragraph to hopefully the correct area ✅
 * American aviator Harriet Quimby – as up to this point none of the other aviator's nationalities are mentioned, I am unclear why hers is here. Also, if she was already an aviator, why did she become interested in aviation during the event?	clarified, she became interested and later became an aviator ✅
 * It was there that she met John Moisant and his sister Matilde. Why is this notable? reworked the section
 * John Moisant of Chicago – why of Chicago? (None of the other aviators’ home towns have been named up to this point.) removed ✅
 * crashed twice at the show is redundant, as the test that follows makes this clear.	hopefully clarified ✅
 * and when he was helped – runs on from a statement. It should be included in a separate sentence. (See Sentence_clause_structure.)	✅
 * the $10,000 prize money - ‘the prize money’.	✅
 * I would place the image on the right (see MOS:IMAGELOC).✅

Controversy

 * There is no need for this separate section heading, particularly as there is text (The aviation committee met to discuss Grahame-White's protest.) that relates directly with text from the previous section.✅
 * The first paragraph needs to be copy edited to remove duplicate information and improve the prose.	✅
 * Link wing tip (Wing tip), note correct spelling.✅

Gallery

 * As I assume the images in this section are all to be found in the Commons category, there is no need for the gallery. See MOS:IMAGES for further information about images and galleries, which discusses my point. removed✅

On hold
I'm putting the article on hold for a week until 14 March to allow time for the issues raised to be addressed. Regards, Amitchell125 (talk) 09:54, 6 March 2024 (UTC)

Passing
Looks good,thanks for producing a fine article. Amitchell125 (talk) 21:04, 13 March 2024 (UTC)