Talk:Internet Leaks/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MarioSoulTruthFan (talk · contribs) 12:34, 22 October 2016 (UTC)

Hello, I'll be review your article soon. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 12:34, 22 October 2016 (UTC)

Infobox

 * The size of the cover should be reduced to at least 300x300.
 * Done.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   17:57, 25 October 2016 (UTC)
 * Should have caption.
 * Is that necessary for an album, since it's assumed that the image is of the album cover?-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   17:57, 25 October 2016 (UTC)
 * I meant alt, my bad here. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 19:21, 25 October 2016 (UTC)

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 * Who produced the album?
 * Added.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   17:57, 25 October 2016 (UTC)
 * "The first single released from Internet Leaks was, "Whatever You Like" a parody of T.I.'s song of the same name." → not included in here.
 * Added.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   17:57, 25 October 2016 (UTC)

Lead

 * The EP contains a parody of → It contains a parody of
 * Done.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   17:57, 25 October 2016 (UTC)
 * At the time of the release of Internet Leaks → At the time of the EP release
 * Done.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   17:57, 25 October 2016 (UTC)
 * Seems like a pretty weak lead to me. Misses information such as: exploration of digital distribution, a little more regarding the reviews, the compostion of the songs, the style/genre of this album ,references to the other music videos as said above.
 * I will work on that.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   18:01, 25 October 2016 (UTC)
 * Nothing was done regarding adding more information to the lead, also add the peak of the Chart performance. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 19:35, 25 October 2016 (UTC)

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 * Are you sure this is the third? It looks like the second to me! MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 19:37, 25 October 2016 (UTC)
 * Fixed.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   17:53, 27 October 2016 (UTC)

Background and recording

 * a means → a mean
 * I'm pretty sure it should be 'means', since 'a mean' is a synonym for average, whereas 'a means' is a way to accomplish something.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   18:00, 25 October 2016 (UTC)
 * Both are correct, actually. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 19:26, 25 October 2016 (UTC)


 * later told Billboard → when?
 * Done.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   17:57, 25 October 2016 (UTC)
 * The single was recorded on September 26, 2008, and uploaded to digital distribution platforms on October 8, 2008 → wrong date and was first made available exclusively on iTunes for two weeks before other platforms, according to the billboard information.
 * Done.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   17:57, 25 October 2016 (UTC)
 * The first three sentences seem quite repetitive with the same cadence →Yankovic...Yankovic... try to variety here, improve.
 * I tried to cut that down some.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   17:57, 25 October 2016 (UTC)
 * Backing Yankovic → Backing him
 * Done.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   17:57, 25 October 2016 (UTC)
 * For "Craiglist", Yankovic → For "Craiglist", the singer
 * Done.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   17:57, 25 October 2016 (UTC)
 * Yankovic first → The artist first
 * I just cut down on other instances of Yankovic so as to allow this one.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   17:57, 25 October 2016 (UTC)
 * although each of the songs on Internet Leaks—sans "Ringtone", which was released the same days as Internet Leaks—had been released as singles preceding the release of the EP. → although each song on Internet Leaks but "Ringtone", which was released the same days as Internet Leaks, had been made available as singles preceding the release of the EP.
 * Changed with slight modification.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   17:57, 25 October 2016 (UTC)
 * re-released → included
 * Done.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   17:57, 25 October 2016 (UTC)

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Composition
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 * No need for such big images, thump size would be more than enough.
 * I dropped their size.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   17:57, 25 October 2016 (UTC)
 * Due to celerity with which Yankovic → Due to the celebrity with which Yankovic? I have no clue what you are trying to say here...
 * 'the' was missing before celerity.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   17:57, 25 October 2016 (UTC)
 * As such, the song explicitly references the Great Recession, which occurred in 2009. → The song explicitly references the Great Recession, which occurred in 2009.
 * Done.--17:57, 25 October 2016 (UTC)
 * Following "Whatever You Like", Yankovic released "Craigslist" on June 16, 2009. → reference?
 * Added.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   17:57, 25 October 2016 (UTC)
 * "Skipper Dan", a style parody of Weezer, was released on July 14, 2009. → as a Single? + reference.
 * Added.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   17:57, 25 October 2016 (UTC)
 * pen the song" → cute but not very encyclopedic
 * Changed.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   17:57, 25 October 2016 (UTC)
 * after he and his family went on the Disneyland Jungle Cruise ride →   after going on a ride on the Disneyland Jungle Cruise with his family; link Disneyland Jungle Cruise
 * Changed.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   17:57, 25 October 2016 (UTC)
 * 'Well, here's a song right here.'" → "Well, here's a song right here.""  Not on given source.
 * Whoops! Wrong AV Club source.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   17:57, 25 October 2016 (UTC)
 * On August 4, 2009, Yankovic released "CNR" → Same as previous
 * Added.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   17:57, 25 October 2016 (UTC)
 * with Rolling Stone specifically noting the influence of the 2007 single "Icky Thump" → you also quote Billboard, which is it gonna be?
 * Billboard is there supporting that it's a White Stripes spoof, and the RS source is the one specifically picking out a song.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   17:57, 25 October 2016 (UTC)
 * The final single, "Ringtone", released on August 25, 2009. → One more time
 * Added.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   17:57, 25 October 2016 (UTC)

Music videos
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 * The first video released was for "Craiglist", directed by Liam Lynch. → The first music video released was for the track "Craiglist", directed by Liam Lynch.
 * Done.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   17:57, 25 October 2016 (UTC)
 * Be aware of the ridirct of the "green screen".
 * As long as it leads to where it needs to go, I don't see the issue, but I explicitly linked it to "Chroma key".-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   17:57, 25 October 2016 (UTC)
 * Directed and created by is totally different a director might not create and in the former case he directed and animated, which is different.
 * OK.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   17:57, 25 October 2016 (UTC)
 * In early August of the same year, a video for "CNR", created by JibJab, was released that animated the song using JibJab employees as actors against a green screen, interspersed with shots of Yankovic and Jon "Bermuda" Schwartz performing on a White Stripes-inspired red-and-white set, dressed as Jack White and Meg White, respectively → In early August of the same year, a video for "CNR", directed and animated by JibJab, was released. The animation used JibJab employees as actors against a green screen. It was interspersed with shots of Yankovic and Jon "Bermuda" Schwartz performing on a White Stripes-inspired red-and-white set, dressed as Jack White and Meg White, respectively.
 * Done.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   17:57, 25 October 2016 (UTC)
 * created by SuperNews! → needless to say
 * I changed to 'animated'.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   17:57, 25 October 2016 (UTC)
 * Lastly, → Finally,
 * Done.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   17:57, 25 October 2016 (UTC)
 * the video was released in 2011 → being released in 2011 and was included on...
 * I just rewrote it in a different way.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   17:57, 25 October 2016 (UTC)

Reception
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 * The songs on the EP were largely favorably received. → The songs on the EP were favorably received.
 * Done.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   17:57, 25 October 2016 (UTC)
 * "highlight" → use your own words
 * Done.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   17:57, 25 October 2016 (UTC)
 * Yankovic leaving the shackles of parody behind, and simply crafting funny, memorable tunes, free of shtick or a sell-by date"; Wild also positively complimented the song's darker nature → this quote is quite long use your own words in between
 * Done.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   17:57, 25 October 2016 (UTC)
 * Matt Wild felt that the parody was "funny and pointed" → from which publication?
 * Added.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   17:57, 25 October 2016 (UTC)
 * You go back and forth with the reviews, they should be sequential.
 * I've ordered them in terms of topic discussed. It starts off with a generic discussion of the EP, and the moves to what particular critics say about certain things.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   17:57, 25 October 2016 (UTC)
 * On December 2, 2009, the EP was nominated for Grammy Award for Best Comedy Album for the 52nd Grammy Awards → The record was nominated for Best Comedy Album at the 52nd Annual Grammy Awards.
 * Done.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   17:57, 25 October 2016 (UTC)

Track listing

 * The following is adapted from the iTunes version of the album, as well as the liner notes from Alpocalypse → Is there any diference?If not you can leave the former reference.
 * It's not really needed, so I just removed it.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   17:57, 25 October 2016 (UTC)
 * You need them, just use the one that has the credits as well. See below the reason. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 19:32, 25 October 2016 (UTC)
 * Use the Itunes metadata its better because Apocalypse has more engineers and other writers, but I only need those who did those songs. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 20:50, 26 October 2016 (UTC)
 * I changed it for the personnel but not the track listing, since that one isn't necessary.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   17:52, 27 October 2016 (UTC)

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Overall GA review

 * I know the album charted but I see no evidence of such.
 * Added.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   17:57, 25 October 2016 (UTC)
 * No credits or personal section? I know that Yankovic does a lot, but I'm pretty sure he doesn't master or mixes his own songs.
 * Added.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   17:57, 25 October 2016 (UTC)
 * I need a reference for that kind of information. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 19:28, 25 October 2016 (UTC)
 * Done.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   17:52, 27 October 2016 (UTC)


 * On hold for seven days, good luck. Ping me when you are done. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 21:42, 24 October 2016 (UTC)
 * I believe that I have changed and/or responded to all the things that you suggested.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   17:57, 25 October 2016 (UTC)
 * There are some issues left that I have raised meanwhile and some that have yet to be addressed. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 21:02, 25 October 2016 (UTC)
 * Sorry about those minor issues. How about now?-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   13:37, 26 October 2016 (UTC)
 * Some of them are still there. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 20:50, 26 October 2016 (UTC)
 * OK, how about now?-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   17:54, 27 October 2016 (UTC)
 * you missed a section. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 21:50, 27 October 2016 (UTC)
 * Is the reference formatting section the only one left? If so, I think I have done what you want (although I will point out that per the GA requirements, they do not have to be perfect).-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   13:25, 28 October 2016 (UTC)

I just asked for consistency. Now passing. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 18:54, 29 October 2016 (UTC)