Talk:Intimacy Remixed/GA1

GA Review
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Not as many nitpicks as for Silent Alarm Remixed, but there are a few:

--Brandt Luke Zorn (talk) 22:56, 6 September 2009 (UTC)
 * "limited edition CD or triple LP" should be "limited edition CD and triple LP"
 * Q: Wouldn't "and" imply that the release included both a CD AND a triple LP (in a bundle sort of way)? RB88 (T) 23:14, 6 September 2009 (UTC)
 * I don't think someone would assume this to be the case unless the wording explicitly said it was a bundle. You could further specify the separate releases by adding "both". --Brandt Luke Zorn (talk) 00:07, 7 September 2009 (UTC)
 * DONE. Workaround.
 * "Several dance acts, DJs, and established musical acts like No Age" suggests that the dance acts and DJs are not "established", and doesn't give any information about what kind of genre No Age or the other group of musicians it's grouped into makes.
 * DONE. More general.
 * "Initial media reaction to the release news was mixed." How so? Also, you only cite one publication's reaction.
 * DONE. Specified.
 * "Promotion"? Why not the more standard title "Release"?
 * DONE.
 * "the lowest that it received from notable publications" Same as last time.
 * D'OH!...NE
 * "Synthpop group Filthy Dukes took control of "One Month Off" and ended up with an electro house version of the track according to Chris Power of Drowned in Sound." I realize this was probably worded like this to avoid repetitive sentences, but it's worded a bit awkwardly.
 * PRE-EMPTIED IT! haha
 * "Better than Heaven" was remixed—or remastered according to Power—[2]by American noise pop duo No Age and begins with a rhythmic pattern on the piano." While it was apparent to me that Power's comment most likely means that their changes were very minimal, it wouldn't necessarily be immediately apparent to everyone. When I checked the source he also said that No Age's remixing "perhaps demastered [it], given the coating of scuzz they add" changes the meaning again, so it would be a good idea to include that line.
 * DONE. Removed, not that necessary.