Talk:Irma González (wrestler)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 18:19, 26 March 2020 (UTC)

Will review. MWright96 (talk) 18:19, 26 March 2020 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

Lead

 * "She is a five-time holder of the Mexican National Women's Championship, a two-time holder of the UWA World Women's Championship, holder of both"- try not to repeat the word "holder" too many times in one sentence
 * "were the first team to win the Mexican National Women's Tag Team Championship held in 1991." - The body and the Mexican National Women's Tag Team Championship both state it was 1990 that Gonzalez and Aguliar won that title not 1991
 * Also the above sentence does not need the word "held" because it is redundant
 * "Indonesian-based World championship" the word "world" in this instance does not need to start with a capital letter
 * "Her wrestling career spanned five decades, from the 1950s to the 1990s." I believe this sentence can be deleted and merged into the existing sentence During her over forty-year career and made shorter

Professional wrestling

 * "including Irma Moralez," - typo; should be Morales
 * Rosita Williams does not need to be linked twice in close succession
 * "Her second reign came to an end at the hands" - try to reword the phrase "at the hands" to something more formal
 * "González had a third reign with the 1959 championship." - better to rewrite the text in bold to championship in 1959.
 * "Regent of Mexico City, Ernesto P. Uruchurtu," - Ernesto P. Uruchurtu, the Regent of Mexico City,
 * "banned women's wrestling there effectively" - a comma should be added inbetween the words "there" and "effectively"
 * "La Dama Enmascarada gained a measure of revenge on" - try to change the text in bold to a phrase that is more formal and neutral
 * "She is the only non-family member ever given the right " - more complete; ever to be given
 * "in '71, '74 and '79," - This portion of text is unencyclopedic. It should be written as in 1971, 1974 and 1979
 * "but records are unclear who she took the title from" - better; unclear as to whom she
 * "by winning Martha's hair in 1982. 1982 also saw" - Try not to have the last word of a sentence start the next one like this
 * "La Mujer X at a regional show in Xalapa, Veracruz to unmask La Mujer X." - rewording the text in bold to the latter or her opponent would be ideal instead of using her name twice in the same sentence.
 * "defeating Lola González on August 27." - please clarify in the artcle whether Gonzalez won that title in 1982 or not
 * "held the championship for 497 days, until December 20, 1991, when the team of Martha Villalobos and Pantera Sureña won the championship." - try to avoid close reptition of the word "championship" and replace it with a similar word