Talk:Irresistible (Jessica Simpson song)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  [talk]  12:38, 11 January 2011 (UTC)

The review will begin in due course. I will post on your talk page when its begun. --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  [talk]  12:38, 11 January 2011 (UTC)
 * No Dablinks
 * No deadlinks
 * Mixture of singlechart and non-singlechart template in the charts section is bad. Please convert all others to single chart for consistency. --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  [talk]  23:00, 12 January 2011 (UTC)
 * But, Canadian Singles chart does not have a template. Also, European Hot 100 and Belgium Ultratip Flanders and Italy are not correctly sourced by the template.. Novice7  |  Talk  08:21, 13 January 2011 (UTC)

More comments to come following my break... --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  [talk]  23:00, 12 January 2011 (UTC)


 * Introduction
 * What is the significance of mentioning the remix in the lead? Was it released anywhere? Did it chart? Did it receive coverage from reliable third party sources? --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  [talk] 
 * I added this in because there is a separate section on Remixes. As the lead should summarize everything, I thought this should be added too. If it should not be included, I'll remove it. Novice7  |  Talk  08:17, 17 January 2011 (UTC)


 * Your analysis of the critical reception is incorrect. Critics praised the song for its themes of new-found love and up-tempo production but criticised Simpson's singing and the sexual nature of the song's lyrics. --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  [talk] 
 * Done


 * where it reached → peaked (overuse of the word reach). Plus best achievements should come first, so eleven in the UK, fifteen in the US and top-twenty in ten other countries. --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  [talk] 
 * Done


 * Despite missing the top-twenty in Australia, it was certified gold. (you need to link this as done in other GA's... see When Love Takes Over. --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  [talk] 
 * Done


 * The song's accompanying music video → "Irresistable"'s accompanying music video, (overuse of phrase, the song). --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  [talk] 
 * Done


 * Phrase about revealing clothes is a little bit of WP:OR. I'd stick to something like... "had a James Bond theme and features scenes where Simpson is dressed as a spy on a mission". --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  [talk] 
 * Done


 * The song was included... → Simpson performed the song as part of .. --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  [talk] 
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 * Simpson also performed the song → The single was promoted with live performances on... --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  [talk] 
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 * The song is featured → Additionally, the song is ... --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  [talk] 
 * Done


 * Infobox
 * Remove sources from recording field. They're not required. Sources in infoboxes are big no-no. --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  [talk] 
 * Done


 * List the producers with their full names Birgisson → Arnthor Birgisson etc. --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  [talk] 
 * Done


 * Background
 * The second paragraph beginning "Sheyne was also involved in the song's melody..." isn't well structured. For example Sheyne's contribution to the background vocals seems misplaced. Try and summarise Sheyne's involvement in the song in two sentences together. --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  [talk] 
 * Rewrote, I guess.


 * Composition
 * "Its beat is set in common time and moves at a tempo of 94 beats per minute.[6] It also has the sequence of Am–Dm7–F–E7 as its chord progression.[6]" → "The beat is set in a common time of 94 betas per minute, with a chord progression of Am–Dm7–F–E7"[6]. (better flow). --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  <sup style="color:black;">[talk] 
 * Done


 * "Simpson's voice" → Simpson's vocals --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  <sup style="color:black;">[talk] 
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 * while the piano pieces → the piano element of the song spans ... --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  <sup style="color:black;">[talk] 
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 * "The version featured on the Lizzie McGuire Soundtrack" --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  <sup style="color:black;">[talk] 
 * Done


 * Stephen Thomas Erlewine of Allmusic, while reviewing the album of the same name, stated that the song and "A Little Bit", another track on the album, were "double-punch" (slight tong-twister., re-write). --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  <sup style="color:black;">[talk] 
 * Done


 * "Similarly, Chuck Taylor of Billboard also reviewed the favorably," → Similarly Billboards Chuck Taylor also reviewed the song positively, adding... (introduce some variation plus make the paragraph make sense). --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  <sup style="color:black;">[talk] '
 * Done


 * Add some comments to the final bit about the negative reception. E.g. However there was some negative criticism towards the lyrics and digital quality of the song.... --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  <sup style="color:black;">[talk] 
 * Done


 * Commercial performance
 * "fter weeks of ascending the chart, it reached its peak position of number fifteen, on the issue dated July 14, 2001" sounds very informal. Try "In Mid-July 2001, it reached its peak of number fifteen". (too many dates makes it sound like a journal). --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  <sup style="color:black;">[talk] 
 * Done


 * But, in New Zealand, the song debuted at number forty-five on the week dated July 29, 2001. The following week, the song dropped to number fifty before peaking at number forty-one.[24] → Although in New Zealand the single debut at number forty-five and dropped to number fifty the subsequent week, it eventually peaked at number forty-one. (you need to add a source to show the dip in chart position). --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  <sup style="color:black;">[talk] 
 * Done


 * Music video
 * Add "According to XYZ" to the first sentence. --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  <sup style="color:black;">[talk] 
 * Done


 * Columbia? by the time people have got to this they won't know what your referring to. Try Columbia Records. --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  <sup style="color:black;">[talk] 
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 * Merge last two sentences with "and". --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  <sup style="color:black;">[talk] 
 * There are three paragraphs. Can you tell me which sentence?
 * "On MTV's Total Request Live countdown, the video reached a peak position of number two.[13] On MuchMusic Canada countdown, the video peaked the number seventeen.[36]" --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  <sup style="color:black;">[talk]  17:44, 24 January 2011 (UTC)
 * Done


 * Are there any more reviews about the video? --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  <sup style="color:black;">[talk] 
 * Couldn't find any. But will try.
 * That's fine, as long as you looked there's no harm. --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  <sup style="color:black;">[talk] 
 * I'll surely try to find more reviews.


 * Remixes
 * Another remix of the song was from the American remix producer Hex Hector.? sloppy. Try ... Another separate remix of the song was produced by American producer, Hex Hector. --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  <sup style="color:black;">[talk]  01:46, 24 January 2011 (UTC)
 * Done


 * According to Slant Magazine, his remix of the song contains soulful ornamental vocals and Giorgio Moroder-style disco strings... According to Slant Magazine, Hector's remix.... (it sounds like slant magazine did the remix). --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  <sup style="color:black;">[talk] 
 * Done


 * Reference [35] Slant → Slant Magazine (the name of the publication)
 * Done


 * This section needs to be placed below the composition section. --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  <sup style="color:black;">[talk] 
 * Done


 * Live performances
 * Simpson performed "Irresistible" on various occasions, including some televised appearances. She also performed the song on her DreamChaser Tour (2001) and Reality Tour (2004). For the DreamChaser Tour, Simpson wanted it to feature her as a singer and dancer in the mold of performers like Britney Spears.[37] - rewrite. this is badly written. Maybe start with Irresistible was performed a considerable number of times by Simpson between 2001 and 2004. It was included on the setlist of her DreamChaser Tour (2001) and Reality Tour (2004). In the book People in the News: Jessica Simpson and Nick Lachey, Terri Dougherty wrote that ....". --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  <sup style="color:black;">[talk]  01:46, 24 January 2011 (UTC)
 * Rewrote to something better (I hope). Please do tell me if it needs more fixing.
 * Much better. --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  <sup style="color:black;">[talk]  17:44, 24 January 2011 (UTC)
 * Thank you.


 * Formats and track listings
 * Formats and track listings → Track list suffices --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  <sup style="color:black;">[talk] 
 * Done


 * Also link the remixers were possible. --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  <sup style="color:black;">[talk] 
 * Done


 * Credits and personnel
 * Unless I'm mistaken, the remix is not included on the album so you couldn't have got the credits from the liner notes... --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  <sup style="color:black;">[talk] 
 * Actually, the remix EP has the credits for remixes. Should I add a source for it separately?
 * Yes please....just in the interest of good referencing. I have no doubt personally. --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  <sup style="color:black;">[talk]  17:44, 24 January 2011 (UTC)
 * Done Added separately.


 * Charts and Certificates
 * See When Love Takes Over or Bad Romance for appropriate ways to list them (either is acceptable alternative). The certifying body needs linking as does Certification. --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  <sup style="color:black;">[talk] 
 * Done


 * Change === Charts === to === Weekly charts ===, === Year-end charts === to === Yearly charts ===. (parallel and equivocal headings). --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  <sup style="color:black;">[talk] 
 * Done


 * References.
 * Can you get a reference in for the release date? its not actually sourced anywhere. --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  <sup style="color:black;">[talk] 
 * Got a ref. But, where to put?
 * A comment at the end of the background section would suffice. "Irresistable" is the title song from Simpson's second album and was released from MM DD, YYYY as the album's lead single.[1] --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  <sup style="color:black;">[talk] 
 * Done Please do tell if it's not okay.


 * Ref [13] link entertainment weekly. --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  <sup style="color:black;">[talk] 
 * Done


 * ref [14], title should = IRRESISTIBLE (Legal Title) BMI Work #5572061, author= (the songwriters!) --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  <sup style="color:black;">[talk] 
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 * ref [22], link to Australian Recording Industry Association? --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  <sup style="color:black;">[talk] 
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 * ref [53], remove and remove the info sourced by it. Popdirt.com not reliable. --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  <sup style="color:black;">[talk] 
 * Done


 * the reference style from the chart performance section doesn't match that in the charts section. In the latter it shows as ARIA Top 50 Singles. Hung Medien but in the former you've put charts.org.nz. Hung Medien. It is is inconsistent. --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  <sup style="color:black;">[talk] 
 * Done Made consistent.


 * discogs is still not a WP:RS... need better source for cover please. --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  <sup style="color:black;">[talk] 
 * Done Added Amazon source.


 * Also some of your references are missing dates, if the website has a date please use it. --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  <sup style="color:black;">[talk] 
 * Done


 * Books are missing the location of the publishers. --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  <sup style="color:black;">[talk] 
 * Added US. Should I be more specific (like New York or California)?
 * Yes please. Otherwise the references are considered incomplete. --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  <sup style="color:black;">[talk] 
 * Done


 * Also look at 4 Minutes (Madonna song) for the proper way to source using musicnotes.com (see the reference itself). --  Lil_ ℧ niquℇ № 1  <sup style="color:black;">[talk]  03:26, 24 January 2011 (UTC)
 * Done