Talk:Ishaq Dar/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Cambalachero (talk · contribs) 14:51, 16 June 2017 (UTC)


 * Image review: File:Ishaq Dar 1.jpg is the only image in the article, and has a good license. No problems.
 * Text: Some google searches only reveal matches from Wikipedia mirrors that reflect this article, so no copyright violation was found.
 * Early life and education
 * Is there no info about his parents? When and where was he born?
 * I couldn't found credible information about his parents, and his birth year and location.


 * He should be called by full name in the first non-lead section.
 * Done, but I don't see this style in bios of FA status.


 * Professional career
 * Why is it written that he "Reportedly" held those offices? Is there any doubt or uncertainty about that?
 * Yes, you are right. does "Reportedly" term allowed in GA status articles?


 * Political career
 * "He was re-elected to the National Assembly for the second time" is redundant: re-elected means precisely being elected for the same office a second time.
 * So what else it should be? He was elected to National Assembly twice from the same constituency so one say that he was re-elected for the same office a second time. No? Similarly, he was elected to Senate thrice.
 * Simply remove the "for the second time" bit, and that's it. Cambalachero (talk) 15:40, 16 June 2017 (UTC)
 * Ok I got it. and what about "for the third time to the Senate"? --Saqib (talk) 15:44, 16 June 2017 (UTC)


 * You may link to Pakistan and weapons of mass destruction when you mentioned the atomic testings.
 * Done.


 * Is "nosedived" an appropriate word? Perhaps you may use "plummeted".
 * Done


 * Many paragraphs are too short, you should combine them into bigger ones.
 * Done.

. please see above answers inline. --Saqib (talk) 15:19, 16 June 2017 (UTC)
 * . anything else? --Saqib (talk) 19:54, 18 June 2017 (UTC)