Talk:Ishe Komborera Africa/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 19:09, 17 October 2016 (UTC)

Will begin this soon. JAGUAR  19:09, 17 October 2016 (UTC)


 * The lead should be expanded in order to summarise the article, particularly the second paragraph
 * The first reference in the lead makes no mention of "God Bless Africa" or "God Bless Zimbabwe"
 * "and then again four days later closure of the first meeting of the Bantu National Congress" - error. and again four days after the closure?
 * "Initially despite that connotation" - I'd remove "initially"
 * "One of their considerations was to ban performance of "Ishe Komborera Africa" in African schools and public performance of it often made people liable for arrest" - as it often
 * "such as; Tanzania used "Mungu ibariki Afrika", Zambia used "Stand and Sing of Zambia, Proud and Free" (to the same tune) and Transkei who used "Nkosi Sikielel' 'Afrika"" - reads a bit odd. I would remove "such as" and just begin the sentence with Tanzania
 * "The act also made it a criminal offense" - offence
 * "In 2004, at the 2004 Africa Cup of Nations in Tunisia" - 2004 is already mentioned so remove "In 2004"
 * No dead links
 * No dab links

I found a few errors, but once they're clarified this should pass. JAGUAR  21:04, 17 October 2016 (UTC)
 * I have fixed the errors that you raised here.  The C of E God Save the Queen!  ( talk ) 09:17, 18 October 2016 (UTC)
 * Thanks! Promoted  JAGUAR   11:04, 18 October 2016 (UTC)