Talk:Islais Creek/GA1

GA Review
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I will be reviewing this article for GA. Give me a little time to read it and give you feedback. On the whole, it looks like a good article but I will give you a list of things that need fixing. Feel free to ask me questions. &mdash; Mattisse (Talk) 19:06, 23 August 2008 (UTC)
 * Here's one....There should be little or no citations in the lead...the info should be repeated later in the article with citations there...see WP:LEAD.  the_ed 17  19:11, 23 August 2008 (UTC)

Since Islais Creek is a culvert that carries storm water, domestic sewage, and industrial wastewater all together, it is possible for the sewage to overflow. Such overflow can cause a public health hazard as Islais Creek displays higher level of heavy metals, PCBs , bacteria , as well as organochlorines than other parts of the San Francisco Bay.
 * (ec) Here is my list of comments.
 * The lead needs to be longer per WP:LEAD and be a concise summary of the major sections of the article.
 * You do not need reference citations in the lead, as the material will be referenced in the main body of the article where you discuss the material in the lead.
 * There are places where you have too many citations, especially when they are the same citation For example:


 * The massive paragraphs need to be broken down into smaller ones for readability and variety.

Otherwise, it looks very good. I may offer more suggestions later. And I am willing to help you out and do some of the work. &mdash; Mattisse (Talk) 19:18, 23 August 2008 (UTC)
 * I fix most of your concerns except for the first. I am not sure what can I add to the lead since this is a short article.— Chris!  c t 20:35, 23 August 2008 (UTC)
 * Maybe you could give some brief tidbits from course and history - like its watershed has been reduced by 80% and at one time the city considered filling it in, that today there are concerted efforts to improve it -- just suggestions. &mdash; Mattisse (Talk) 21:01, 23 August 2008 (UTC)
 * I will try to address this asap. Thanks — Chris!  c t 22:11, 23 August 2008 (UTC)


 * This article is really very good. References, prose etc. look great. A good job. &mdash; Mattisse  (Talk) 21:38, 23 August 2008 (UTC)
 * I expand the lead. What do you think?— Chris!  c t 00:37, 24 August 2008 (UTC)


 * It is fine. Just a few more details:
 * Question: "...and near Third Street where the creek emptied in the San Francisco Bay." Does it still empty into the bay today?
 * Yes — Chris!  c t 18:47, 24 August 2008 (UTC)


 * "...community groups in the Bayview". What is the Bayview?
 * It is the name of the neighborhood. I add a wikilink to clarify it.— Chris!  c t 18:47, 24 August 2008 (UTC)


 * You do not have an access date for reference 6. I realize it is the same as one of the above, but there it is called by a different name.
 * Reference 6 is a note so it doesn't need access date.— Chris!  c t 19:42, 24 August 2008 (UTC)
 * O.K. I'll take your word for it.