Talk:Islands (miniseries)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: 1989 (talk · contribs) 15:58, 11 June 2017 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * "finally encounters it however" Remove the last word.
 * "leading Finn to wanting to discover" Doesn't sound right.
 * "who stow away" You mean stows?
 * "but Finn and Susan are able to fight them." Did they "fight" the jellyfish or tried to get them off Jake?
 * "After Jake complains" I'd replace the first word.
 * "Later Finn, Alva and her pet bear encounter" I would restructure this part.
 * "She approaches Dr. Gross if they can live off the island." Doesn't sound right.
 * "But now that Finn" Not the best word to start a sentence.
 * "for parts unknown" How about 'for unknown reasons'?
 * In regards to the entire "Plot" section, I have fixed the above errors and copy-edited the section. Here are the changes-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   18:51, 11 June 2017 (UTC)
 * In regards to the entire "Plot" section, I have fixed the above errors and copy-edited the section. Here are the changes-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   18:51, 11 June 2017 (UTC)


 * "Minerva, Laraine Newman" Missing a word.
 * Done.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   18:51, 11 June 2017 (UTC)


 * "Root reprise their roles" Say the full name.
 * I'm not really sure what you mean here.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   18:51, 11 June 2017 (UTC)
 * Mistake on my part.


 * "and so the robot returns to Finn" Remove and.
 * "and so she approaches" Remove and.
 * "Dr. Gross, however, convinces her" However isn't needed.
 * "Kara stops Frieda from leaving and drags her away crying." Was she controlled at that time?
 * "Flashbacks detail how Minerva, a nurse, met Finn's father Martin Mertins when he was hospitalized after it was mistakenly believed he was attempting to leave the island with a group of escapees." So that moment caused the flashbacks to happen?
 * "Now that Finn is here with her, however, she expresses" Doesn't sound right.
 * "first place. ... What" Do you mean [...]?
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):  d (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * "in early November 2016, ComiXology" Ref 6 didn't say anything about the publisher.
 * Whoops; wrong source. Fixed.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   18:51, 11 June 2017 (UTC)
 * Whoops; wrong source. Fixed.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   18:51, 11 June 2017 (UTC)


 * "on December 9, Cartoon Network" If the art crew released the statement on their Tumblr, I don't think it'd be on CN's behalf.
 * Rewritten to clearly express it was released via the crew Tumblr.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   18:51, 11 June 2017 (UTC)


 * The Blumenfeld quote is too long, I recommend removing some things, and keeping what's important.
 * I have trimmed it by a sentence or two.-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   18:51, 11 June 2017 (UTC)
 * Per, you're going to have to make it shorter, or paraphrase what you kept.


 * Some references link to social networking sites, but since I was able to confirm that they are associated with Cartoon Network and AT staff, I'll accept it in good faith.
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Good work on the article. When you resolve or provide explanations to my concerns, I'll look it over. -- 1989 15:58, 11 June 2017 (UTC)
 * Thank you for the review. I have responded to and/or complied with your requests. How does it look now?-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   18:51, 11 June 2017 (UTC)
 * Replies are above. -- 1989 20:02, 11 June 2017 (UTC)
 * Prose changes have been made and I deleted one more sentence from the long quote (the quote in question is now only three sentences, which is well within the acceptability range of almost all manual of styles).-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   13:12, 12 June 2017 (UTC)
 * Good work on the article. When you resolve or provide explanations to my concerns, I'll look it over. -- 1989 15:58, 11 June 2017 (UTC)
 * Thank you for the review. I have responded to and/or complied with your requests. How does it look now?-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   18:51, 11 June 2017 (UTC)
 * Replies are above. -- 1989 20:02, 11 June 2017 (UTC)
 * Prose changes have been made and I deleted one more sentence from the long quote (the quote in question is now only three sentences, which is well within the acceptability range of almost all manual of styles).-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   13:12, 12 June 2017 (UTC)


 * Thanks for getting my concerns fixed. I can now pass the article. Congratulations. -- 1989 13:45, 12 June 2017 (UTC)