Talk:Iso Rae/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Casliber (talk · contribs) 03:57, 28 July 2014 (UTC)


 * Right then......let's see.....


 * If there was a way that we could not start the second sentence in the lead with "Rae..." it'd be good as we're repeating her name from sentence one, but "She..." looks a bit odd there I concede...
 * Reworked. hamiltonstone (talk) 12:33, 28 July 2014 (UTC)
 * as an aside, should Etaples art colony be at Étaples art colony? If not, then we need a redirect....
 * One would think so but, for whatever reason - possibly including the inability of art galleries to find how to type an "É" in html - it seems quite common for reliable sources to not use the acute, so i think it can stay. hamiltonstone (talk) 12:33, 28 July 2014 (UTC)
 * " longest-term residents"- an apt description but odd construction of words - be nice if we could come up with another way of wording it....can't think of one
 * Since she wasn't the longest term, i decided not to make a thing of it, so it now simply reads "Rae became a long-term resident at the Étaples colony"hamiltonstone (talk) 13:33, 28 July 2014 (UTC)
 * any significant works that can be discussed would be a big plus - seems odd to have an article on an artist and not have any works discussed
 * Have addressed this via the war works - which i discovered are public domain! hooray! hamiltonstone (talk) 13:28, 28 July 2014 (UTC)
 * another artist that died in a mental hospital - wow. Any extra info here would be good....but hard to find I wager.
 * Nothing in what i have read to date, and i've gone back over everything i think. Not something people tend to record except in full-length bios - and there isn't one of her. hamiltonstone (talk) 13:28, 28 July 2014 (UTC)
 * Yeah, thought that might be the case....my other thought was getting a death cert....but seems a bit extreme and more for genealogy than wikipedia...Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 14:30, 28 July 2014 (UTC)
 * A location for Musée du Touquet would be good to give it context.
 * Done. hamiltonstone (talk) 12:33, 28 July 2014 (UTC)
 * this source mentions the 75 works being bought by the AWM - would be good to add.
 * 75 in Oz - 11 by the AWM - yes, i must have been lazy and didn't make full use of that article. I hope I've corrected that now. hamiltonstone (talk) 13:28, 28 July 2014 (UTC)
 * The war material is fascinating, as are the pastels - if we can get any more of this sort of info into the article that'd be good.
 * Have added more detail from that article. hamiltonstone (talk) 13:28, 28 July 2014 (UTC)

Nice read overall. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 04:06, 28 July 2014 (UTC)