Talk:Ivan Asen I/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: CPA-5 (talk · contribs) 13:31, 4 September 2019 (UTC)

Claim my seat here. Cheers. CPA-5 (talk) 13:31, 4 September 2019 (UTC)


 * I believe we should add "(died in 1196)" after "Asen I or John Asen I (Bulgarian: Иван Асен I)"
 * After the emperor had refused them The Emperor.
 * fled over the Danube, but they returned in the autumn Link Danube.
 * over the lands along the Struma river in the early The Struma River.
 * them to return to the Byzantine Empire in the autumn.[34][31][35] Re-order the refs in numerical order.
 * thus adopting the name of a 10th-century tzar (or emperor) of Bulgaria Link tzar.
 * Which English do you use? Because I can see some American v. British usages.
 * First Bulgarian Empire is overlinked.
 * Link Constantinople.
 * occupy new territories of the Byzantine Empires You mean Byzantine Empire?
 * I see eight howevers, maybe we should limit the word to max two howevers?
 * Cumans is overlinked.
 * The emperor dispatched Alexios Gidos and Basil Vatatzes The Emperor?
 * the Byzantine fortresses along the river Struma leaving The River Struma?
 * for a huge ransom from the emperor The Emperor?
 * tsar v. tzar maybe standardise one of the tsars?
 * Isaac Komnenos persuaded Ivanko to kill the tsar The Tsar?
 * with a sword hidden under his garments.[71][67] Re-order the refs in numerical order.
 * became the emperor of Bulgaria in 1218 The Emperor?


 * , thank you for your comprehensive review. I fixed the above problems. Sorry, I do not know which English I use. Borsoka (talk) 00:47, 8 September 2019 (UTC)
 * I think American because it was written in American first so remove the hyphens and replace the space in the words counter-offensive, counter-attacks and merge counter-invasion. Cheers. CPA-5 (talk) 18:19, 8 September 2019 (UTC)

Images
 * Looks good to me.

Sources

I'll do this tomorrow.
 * O City of Byzantium, Annals of Niketas Choniatēs's source needs a Google Books' URL.
 * Some ISBNs have hyphens while others don't maybe standardise them.
 * The Crusade of Frederick Barbarossa needs a Google Books' URL.
 * Chary's book needs a Google Books' URL.
 * Curta's ISBN goes to another book. Wrong ISBN?
 * Fine's book needs a Google Books' URL.
 * Standardise Brill and BRILL.
 * Petkov's book needs a Google Books' URL.
 * Same as above.
 * The rest looks good.

Infobox
 * Looks good to me.


 * , thank your for your further comments and suggestions. I think I fixed the above problems. Please let me know if any further action is needed. Borsoka (talk) 03:39, 9 September 2019 (UTC)
 * I see here and there "the emperor" instead of "the Emperor". For the rest, it looks good to go. Cheers. CPA-5 (talk) 20:30, 9 September 2019 (UTC)
 * Thank you. I fixed. I did not change one sentence, because it is a quote. Borsoka (talk) 00:02, 10 September 2019 (UTC)
 * Looks good to me, I'll pass it. Cheers. CPA-5 (talk) 14:45, 10 September 2019 (UTC)
 * Again thank you for your review, and also for promoting the article. Have a nice week! Borsoka (talk) 00:52, 11 September 2019 (UTC)