Talk:Iye Idolorusan

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Peyton's peer review
Hi Peyton, I started a section on your sandbox talk page, but I think this is where I am supposed to peer review your article. Cindychristy1231 (talk) 22:30, 29 November 2018 (UTC)

Payton, Your article is thorough in listing the events that led to Iye taking control of the kingdom’s affairs, and how she came to act as regent for so long. There is quite a bit of good info there, a little bit more description of those events that occurred might give a clearer picture of Iye Idolorusan’s life. Because the information is all in one paragraph, you might think about sectioning the article. Possibilities might be: A lead section with brief info containing much of what is there in the first sentence, adding something else she was well known for (coming from ruling family, or excellent trader). I just realized I must beef up my skimpy intro on my page.

The next section could be about her background or “Family and early life”, again, you have plenty of facts, possible just more organization. Her family history, siblings, her father’s death, relationship and events with her sister, etc. (Iye was described as “a women of great character” (in the cited article)

Thinking of what might be a good heading for the next section…how she came to power, what led up to her taking control i.e. trade decline, no suitable ruler, etc.

In the first line of the page, it’s mentioned that Iye died between 1870 and 1875, then in the later part of the article where it mentions “As a result, Warri lacked another king until 1937, although Iye served as a regent. She continued to live in Bobi, while her son founded his own village” it threw me off, it seems as if Iye served as regent until 1937, though she was dead by 1875. Then tying in that last bit about Commander Tudor of the Firefly (ship?) and what his mission was and how it related to Iye. (this happened in 1849 p. 215 of cited article. Then add an explanation of who Beecroft is.

I will say that I searched for more articles to cite and could not find any but the article that is cited “The Itsekiri in the Nineteenth Century; An Outline Social History” has more info that might pull the whole piece together. I read through some of it and there are good additional facts that tie events together more.

You might consider a section about the Aftermath or Iye’s legacy, her son and destruction of Bobi.

I know I made a lot of suggestions, I hope it helps. It has helped me to re-look at my article, I also list facts and events but I fail to mention how they tie in and why they are important. Your tone is balanced and neutral. I think the most important thing is to re-read the cited article and see if you can make her story flow in a clear timeline. Add a little more background info, what life was like in that place at that time – all available in the Lloyd article! I think you found that; it's really good. Good luck!Cindychristy1231 (talk) 03:15, 30 November 2018 (UTC)