Talk:Iyengar Yoga/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 17:28, 22 March 2020 (UTC)

Will review. MWright96 (talk) 17:28, 22 March 2020 (UTC)
 * Many thanks, will respond promptly. Chiswick Chap (talk) 19:40, 22 March 2020 (UTC)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

History

 * "B. K. S. Iyengar began teaching gradually," - clarify what exactly Iyengar was teaching
 * Done.


 * "The book has been described as the bible of modern yoga," - perhaps mention who described the boook as the bible of modern yoga
 * Done.


 * "and has been translated into at least 23 languages.[9][1]" - refs in numerical order please
 * Done.


 * Wikilink Pune
 * Done.


 * "in Inner London Education Authority evening classes" - try to avoid a violation of WP:SEAOFBLUE by rewriting this section of text
 * Done.


 * I believe the fifth paragraph in this section would be better off merged into the fourth paragraph in this section
 * Done.

Style

 * "The style "emphasises precision and alignment"," - according to whom?
 * Attributed.


 * "i.e. moving a little in the right direction" - slightly is more formal
 * Edited.


 * "Postures are held for a relatively long period compared to other schools of yoga;" - clarify it is a long period of time
 * Done.


 * "to enjoy the benefits of many asanas" - this sounds a little informal and might be better off to be made more formal if possible
 * Done


 * "Postures are held for a relatively long period" - same query as the third one in this section
 * Done.


 * "(such as Trikonasana and Virabhadrasana[18])," - the reference would be better off placed at the end of the comma
 * Done.


 * Trikonasana should not be linked twice in close succession
 * Fixed.


 * Delink Mary Dunn since she is already linked in the previous section
 * Done.

Training, certification, and standards

 * "and updated its ethics standards (based on the Yamas and Niyamas in the Yoga Sutras of Patanjali)" - don't think the parentheses are appropriate here
 * Removed.