Talk:J. Michael Miller/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Jenhawk777 (talk · contribs) 18:23, 18 November 2022 (UTC)

Hello, I am happy to be doing this, and will start soon as explained on talk page.Jenhawk777 (talk) 18:23, 18 November 2022 (UTC)

Whenever I make a request that you change something, I will expect either cooperation, designated by the placement of a ✅ template directly beneath the request, or an explanation with source support about why you do not agree. I will accept either one, but please do not do nothing at all and then place a template on it as if you had. That will lead to failure and this is a little gem of an article that deserves GA, so please don't do that!

Lead
In my first skim through, my initial comment is that the lead needs a little expanding. I would like to see another sentence from "Early life", I would like to see the second paragraph broken into two shorter paragraphs, and I would like to see the addition of a fourth paragraph summarizing more of his views.

My second comment is that there is some jargon sprinkled through this article - the difference between Presbyteral ministry and Episcopal ministry is not something the ordinary sophomore reader would know, and there is no explanation - which would solve that problem - and terms such as the 'Synodal Path' will confound our ordinary readers and they won't go look it up. They're sophomores. :-) Explain why we should care.

Early life
I find the article interesting and well written, and I really like that you have some interesting tidbits. The part about polio is very humanizing, and I am wondering if he has done any writing on suffering, the role of suffering in faith, how it impacted his views and understanding - anything you can find - and if that could be included as a reference to his later views it would be pure gold. Is there anything anywhere on why he chose Catholicism? That would be worth including in Early life as well.

Shouldn't "noviceship" be "novitiate"? With some explanation of what that is of course - training period for new candidates that is a kind of probation period when they can still change their minds - something like that. For Protestants, a "seminarian" is someone attending seminary which is post-graduate - a seminarian gets a master's degree or a PhD. - so I personally found this sentence confusing:. Perhaps that could be a little clearer?

The last sentence in this section is awkward - perhaps flip the order of statements there? "On June 29, 1975, in a ceremony at St. Peter's Square led by Pope Paul VI, Miller was one of 359 men ordained to the Catholic priesthood by the Pope in the same ceremony." or some such thing.

I will come back (in my third go through) to check as many citations as I can manage. We are getting ready for the holidays here so this week will be especially busy in RL, but I promise I will get to that as soon as I am able. Jenhawk777 (talk) 19:17, 19 November 2022 (UTC)

Hold
Bloom6132 I have been checking periodically but have not seen a response to any of this. I have not seen any activity on your talk page either. I am guessing that whatever had you occupied in RL has taken over for a bit, so I am putting this on hold for now. If you return and want to pursue, let me know. I am willing to pick it up again. Jenhawk777 (talk) 18:20, 9 December 2022 (UTC)

Status query
Jenhawk777, Bloom6132, this review has been open for seven weeks, and not a single edit has been made to the article to address the issues raised; it's been over four weeks since the most recent reviewer post on this page. If there isn't action in, say, the next seven days, this should probably be closed. BlueMoonset (talk) 03:36, 9 January 2023 (UTC)


 * I put it on hold in hopes of a response, but I will go ahead and close it. Jenhawk777 (talk) 05:03, 9 January 2023 (UTC)