Talk:J. T. Realmuto/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk · contribs) 17:35, 25 August 2021 (UTC)

I will be reviewing this! Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 17:35, 25 August 2021 (UTC)

Lead

 * ”He played various sports throughout his childhood, and took both the baseball and gridiron football teams of Carl Albert High School to state championship titles” – “He played various sports as he grew up, helping the baseball and gridiron football teams of Carl Albert High School win state championship titles.”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  21:56, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * ” rather than commit” – “rather than honor a commitment”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  21:56, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * No comma needed after designated for assignment
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  21:56, 25 August 2021 (UTC)

Early life

 * ” Realmuto had a close relationship with his mother Margaret, who drove him to his Little League baseball games and various other sporting matches” – “Realmuto’s mother Margaret often drove him to his Little League baseball games and various other sporting matches.” Just to keep from mistakenly implying that Realmuto and his father were not close.
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  21:56, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * No comma needed after “the age of five”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  21:56, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * ”he picked up” – “he started playing”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  21:56, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * Link tennis
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  21:56, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * ”by scoring” – “by recording”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  21:56, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * ” was .595, with 21 home runs” – “was .595, and he had 21 home runs”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  22:14, 25 August 2021 (UTC)

Minor league career

 * ” would occasionally serve as the catcher for Carl Albert” – “would occasionally catch for Carl Albert”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  21:56, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * ”was catching, and told” – Comma not needed, since later clause is not independent.
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  21:56, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * ”offer, with a” – “offer, which included a”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  21:56, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * No comma needed after Cossins
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  21:56, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * ”scoring a critical” – “recording a critical”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  21:56, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * ”He was one of three Hammerheads” – “Realmuto was one of three Hammerheads” – to show it wasn’t Fernandez (though I’ll bet he was one of the others.)
 * ✅ Nope, Yelich and Ozuna! They picked for power that year —  Ghost River  21:56, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * No comma needed after “37 percent of attempted base stealers”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  21:56, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * Instead of listing the plate appearances after the batting average stat, I would list the at bats figure instead. This is because batting average is calculated from at bats, not plate appearances.  This goes for the whole article.
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  21:56, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * No comma needed after “batted .222”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  21:56, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * ”was further hindered” – “was hindered” – Fernandez was a great player, but being separated from him wasn’t necessarily a hindrance.
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  21:56, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * ” was stronger, with relief pitcher” – “was stronger; relief pitcher” Not sure “with” is supposed to be used quite in that manner.
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  21:56, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * ” Realmuto received another minor league All-Star Game appearance in 2013, as one of nine Suns selected for the Southern League showcase” – “Realmuto was one of nine Suns selected for the Southern League showcase”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  21:56, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * No comma needed after “hitting .239”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  21:56, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * I would take out “with the option for a young prospect to take over in the future.” Either that, or mention who voiced this possibility.  Theoretically, any position has the option for a young prospect to take over in the future.
 * Reworded; it was very much A Thing that year that they went with Salty instead of calling up one of their catching prospects —  Ghost River  21:56, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * ”batting dramatically increased” – “batting dramatically improved”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  21:56, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * ”Player of the Week, after scoring” – No comma needed
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  21:56, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * ”multi-hit games, striking out” – “multi-hit games while striking out”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  21:56, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * ” He was meant to appear in his third minor league All-Star Game, but was unavailable due to a promotion” – “He was selected to his third minor league All-Star Game but did not appear due to a promotion.”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  21:56, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * I would mention that Realmuto helped Jacksonville win the Southern League championship. (It’s implied lower down, but I think it’d be best to state it up here too.)
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  21:56, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * Nicolino’s been almost as good as Realmuto in the majors, too! [Sarcasm]

2014-15

 * ” we think he can” – “we think…can” – Works better grammatically the way this quote is presented in the sentence.
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  22:00, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * Take out “later that week” – that the debut was four days later is already made clear.
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  22:00, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * ”scoring three RBIs off of” – “recording three RBIs against”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  22:00, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * ”during which he” – “in which he had”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  22:00, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * Spring training is already linked.
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  22:00, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * ”in 2015, but was” – No comma needed, since latter clause isn’t independent.
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  22:00, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * ”He scored his” – “He hit his”. Also, who was the home run against?
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  22:00, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * ” and the second inside-the-park home run” – “and the second to hit an inside-the-park home run” Cool stat, not something you’d expect from a catcher (as you’re no doubt familiar with!)
 * ✅ Hey, I'm actually faster than I look! One of my advantages on the bag; nobody expects the catcher to barrel at them full-tilt! —  Ghost River  22:00, 25 August 2021 (UTC)

2016-17

 * ”to play in other positions” – I don’t think “in” is needed.
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  22:14, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * ” of the regular season, after scoring” – comma not needed.
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  22:14, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * ” a game-tying run in an” – “tying the game in an”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  22:14, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * ” Realmuto was named the recipient of the Jeff Conine Award” – “Realmuto won the Jeff Conine Award”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  22:14, 25 August 2021 (UTC)

2018

 * ”suffering a bone bruise” – “sustaining a bone bruise” – for variety from the next sentence.
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  22:14, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * ” becoming one of few remaining veterans left as part of” – “one of the few remaining veterans due to”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  22:14, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * ” as the only Marlin selected by the team” – “when he was the only Marlin selected”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  22:14, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * ”of the game, and walked” – “of the game and walked”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  22:14, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * ” with a .277 batting average, hitting 21 home runs, 74 RBIs, and scoring 74 runs” – “with a .277 batting average, 21 home runs, 74 RBIs, and 74 runs scored”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  22:14, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * Take out “from the team”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  22:14, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * ” the Marlins named Realmuto their Most Valuable Player in 2018” – “Realmuto became the Marlins’ Most Valuable Player in 2018.”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  22:14, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * ”offensive player in each position” – “offensive player at each position”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  22:14, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * I would make the last sentence of this section the first sentence of the next section. Then, start what is now the first sentence of it “However…” and change “informed” to “had informed”.
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  22:14, 25 August 2021 (UTC)

2019

 * ” once again serving as the only member of his team to make an appearance” – “again the only member of his team selected”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  22:14, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * ” By the time that he was shut down for the season, Realmuto was hitting” – “In 2019, Realmuto hit”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  22:14, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * No comma needed after .275
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  22:14, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * Didn’t realize the Phillies went so long without winning Silver Sluggers! They still had a lot of good players at least through 2012.
 * We sure did, but everyone else just had better! If it weren't for that meddling Pujols, Ryan Howard should have gotten at least one more. —  Ghost River  22:14, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * ”to his first-ever” – “to the first-ever”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  22:14, 25 August 2021 (UTC)

2020-21

 * ” a strained hip flexor, and missed” – “a strained hip flexor, and he missed”
 * ” the same day that he was signed to the Phillies as a free agent, reliever Archie Bradley tweeted, "#SignJT"” – “reliever Archie Bradley tweeted, "#SignJT" immediately after [or “the same day as” if it wasn’t after] he himself signed with the Phillies.”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  22:14, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * ” scoring three runs off of” – “driving in three runs against”
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  22:14, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * ”it was the Phillies home run” – first home run, I’m presuming.
 * ✅ Yes, unfortunately. /Cries in Mike Schmidt era —  Ghost River  22:14, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * ✅ Yes, unfortunately. /Cries in Mike Schmidt era —  Ghost River  22:14, 25 August 2021 (UTC)

Player profile

 * Take out “in their measurements”
 * ✅ and added "of throws" to clarify what the accuracy is, exactly —  Ghost River  22:14, 25 August 2021 (UTC)

Personal life

 * This section looks good!

Just minor fixes; let me know when you’ve made them! Also, thanks for the Balester review! Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 18:31, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * Of course! Balester is a name I heard thrown around when he was a Nat (my grandpa was the one family member who we never got on board with the Phils), but I really knew nothing about him. J. T., on the other hand -- this one was a labor of love, and thank you very much for reviewing it! I think everything has been addressed! —  Ghost River  22:14, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * Looks good now, passing! Excellent work! I should have time to give Tyler Skaggs a look soon, as well. Hope it makes it to FA! Also, I may be nominating Willie Mays for FAC again sometime soon. It didn't get promoted the last couple of times, and the last time, the big issue seemed to be that no one was commenting on it. No pressure, but if I do nominate again soon and you have time, your feedback would be appreciated! Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 00:03, 29 August 2021 (UTC)