Talk:JFK/UMass station/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: SNUGGUMS (talk · contribs) 01:28, 4 February 2020 (UTC)

I shall review. If my opening comments aren't up within a week, then please ping me here. SNUGGUMS (talk / edits) 01:28, 4 February 2020 (UTC)

The infobox and lead shall come first.....

Infobox

 * I will assume good faith that File:Outbound Braintree Branch train at JFK UMass station, July 2013.JPG is taken from the uploader, though am not sure why its summary reads "Taken on 5 July 2015" when 2013 is used elsewhere.
 * ✅ That was my error during upload - I was also uploading photos I took of the station in 2015.
 * Braintree branch line links to something not affiliated with the MBTA. For consistency with how you use the collective Old Colony Lines to list the three commuter rail lines this station is part of, it could help to use Red Line (MBTA) in place of the "Braintree" bit along with "Ashmont Branch" when that covers both of the line's paths.
 * The Red Line is a service; the Ashmont and Braintree branches are physical lines. Same with the three named commuter rail services, versus the Old Colony Mainline . I did fix the links to be more clear.
 * Where does 362 come from for commuter rail boardings? I can't seem to find that here or in its given files.
 * That's because the MBTA chose a particularly asinine format for the data. The 362 is the sum of the listed inbound and outbound boardings for the three lines. I added a hidden comment to clarify.
 * Are 2014 stats the most recent available for subway ridership? If anything more up-to-date can be found, then I'd use that.
 * ❌ Unfortunately, they are. Hopefully more recent data will be released this year.

Lead

 * To give readers a clearer connection between this and the "Columbia" name, I would mention that the renaming took place in 1982. They might not look at the infobox or article body right away after reading the lead.
 * "The station became more important" is a personal opinion
 * ✅ I've also added a citation to clarify that point in the text.
 * "1987-88 renovation" → "1987–1988 renovation"
 * That last sentence is quite a mouthful! I'd split it by turning the semi-colon after "resumed in 1997" into a period.
 * It feels somewhat repetitive to see many sentences start with "the"
 * That last sentence is quite a mouthful! I'd split it by turning the semi-colon after "resumed in 1997" into a period.
 * It feels somewhat repetitive to see many sentences start with "the"
 * It feels somewhat repetitive to see many sentences start with "the"

More to follow later on. SNUGGUMS (talk / edits) 17:10, 9 February 2020 (UTC)
 * Thanks for taking the review! I've added my comments above. Pi.1415926535 (talk) 20:09, 9 February 2020 (UTC)

Old Colony Railroad and BERy

 * There's an instance of "BER" which seems to be missing its lowercase "y", found within "sold the Shawmut Branch to the BER".
 * Per WP:REPCITE, you don't need to use a citation more than once consecutively within a paragraph. In other words, I'd remove the "Report of the Transit Department for the Year ending December 31, 1926" ref after the "flashed with copper" bit because it and everything up to "designed by William D. Austin" are attributed to the same source.
 * Not sure "like other stations on the Dorchester Extension" is really relevant
 * ❌ I think that's reasonable to note. Pi.1415926535 (talk) 01:19, 17 February 2020 (UTC)
 * Not sure "like other stations on the Dorchester Extension" is really relevant
 * ❌ I think that's reasonable to note. Pi.1415926535 (talk) 01:19, 17 February 2020 (UTC)

I'll next do the "MBTA era" subsection. SNUGGUMS (talk / <b style="color:#009900">edits</b>) 05:39, 16 February 2020 (UTC)

MBTA era
Hopefully "Station layout" can be done in one go when I assess that. <b style="color:#009900">SNUGGUMS</b> (<b style="color:#009900">talk</b> / <b style="color:#009900">edits</b>) 06:25, 17 February 2020 (UTC)
 * You should spell out the MBTA abbreviation upon first mention in article body. I do realize it's been done so in the lead, but that is supposed to summarize content already written out and supported by citations in the body.
 * Almost every sentence in the second paragraph starts with "the", which gets redundant
 * It also feels monotonous to have both File:JFK UMass station Columbia Road headhouse, April 2016.JPG and File:JFK UMass station viewed from commuter rail platform, April 2016.JPG aligned towards the left. For diversity sake, I'd align one of them towards the right. On another note, I see no good reason to suspect improper licensing with either.
 * "increased the importance of the station" is an opinion
 * ❌ That's firmly supported by the citation.
 * I've added a second source to this claim.
 * "a $1 million renovation of the station"..... if opting to round up from the actual $998,600, then I'd use something like "almost" or "nearly" to indicate that this wasn't the exact number (which is what the current text suggests).
 * ❌ That's within the realm of reasonable rounding. Four sig figs is likely false precision for a project of that size, especially for a pre-construction estimate.
 * See previous comments on WP:REPCITE for the fifth paragraph (unnecessary consecutive uses of the "Changes to Transit Service in the MBTA district" ref)
 * No longer the case, as I added another sentence with a different source.
 * We have a non-working link (which you titled "The Urban Ring Phase 2: Revised Draft Environmental Impact Report/Statement")
 * Replace the hyphens surrounding "in addition to around a dozen already present" with longer dashes (—)
 * No exact amount of cameras before the 50 additional installations was given, only "more than 10"
 * "several months" is exaggerating when "several" means at least five and the 2019 reduced Red Line service actually lasted for three months following its June derailment
 * ❌ Merriam-Webster says "at least two" which is how I've always heard it used. Pi.1415926535 (talk) 08:12, 17 February 2020 (UTC)
 * Outside of this article, uses I've come across do tend to imply above three. Given that it's an ambiguous term to begin with, I recommend giving the more clear-cut three when this is known for certain, which is more to the point. <b style="color:#009900">SNUGGUMS</b> (<b style="color:#009900">talk</b> / <b style="color:#009900">edits</b>) 14:41, 17 February 2020 (UTC)
 * Okay, fair. I'll change that with the next round of revisions. Pi.1415926535 (talk) 01:18, 18 February 2020 (UTC)
 * No exact amount of cameras before the 50 additional installations was given, only "more than 10"
 * "several months" is exaggerating when "several" means at least five and the 2019 reduced Red Line service actually lasted for three months following its June derailment
 * ❌ Merriam-Webster says "at least two" which is how I've always heard it used. Pi.1415926535 (talk) 08:12, 17 February 2020 (UTC)
 * Outside of this article, uses I've come across do tend to imply above three. Given that it's an ambiguous term to begin with, I recommend giving the more clear-cut three when this is known for certain, which is more to the point. <b style="color:#009900">SNUGGUMS</b> (<b style="color:#009900">talk</b> / <b style="color:#009900">edits</b>) 14:41, 17 February 2020 (UTC)
 * Okay, fair. I'll change that with the next round of revisions. Pi.1415926535 (talk) 01:18, 18 February 2020 (UTC)
 * Okay, fair. I'll change that with the next round of revisions. Pi.1415926535 (talk) 01:18, 18 February 2020 (UTC)

Station layout

 * If File:Aerial view of JFK UMass station, July 2019.JPG is a screenshot of a map, then I'm not sure it's appropriate to claim as own work
 * Not to worry - it is a photo I took from an airplane on approach to Logan.
 * In that case, this is fine to include :) <b style="color:#009900">SNUGGUMS</b> (<b style="color:#009900">talk</b> / <b style="color:#009900">edits</b>) 00:44, 23 February 2020 (UTC)
 * "A two-lane busway, drop-off lane, and plaza are located east of the tracks." needs to be cited
 * More WP:REPCITE with the last paragraph (only one use of "Improving the Southwest Expressway: A Conceptual Plan" is needed at the end of the paragraph)
 * More WP:REPCITE with the last paragraph (only one use of "Improving the Southwest Expressway: A Conceptual Plan" is needed at the end of the paragraph)

Bus connections
Almost done! I'll get the references section in my next batch. <b style="color:#009900">SNUGGUMS</b> (<b style="color:#009900">talk</b> / <b style="color:#009900">edits</b>) 23:24, 22 February 2020 (UTC)
 * File:MBTA route 41 bus at JFK UMass station, August 2018.JPG is A-OK to use
 * I don't see any mention of 1988 here
 * ✅ Added a cite with the date
 * Perhaps prose would be better to use for the routes instead of a list consisting of only three entries.
 * ❌ Per some previous discussions, MBTA bus route names use the formatting from the MBTA website (example). Because of that, it's easier to have in a list than in prose. Pi.1415926535 (talk) 00:24, 23 February 2020 (UTC)
 * The hyphens around "and later, bus" as well as "both planned track work and unplanned incidents" should be replaced with longer dashes (—)

Overall

 * Prose: Some hyphens still should be altered
 * Referencing: Citation format needs adjusting
 * Coverage: Seems good
 * Neutrality: Are you sure "importance" is a good term to use for describing this station? It seems to reflect someone's personal views. Maybe "prominence" would be better or perhaps something on its use by commuters/their demands.
 * Stability: Nothing of concern
 * Media: Every image has appropriate licensing
 * Verdict: Placing the nomination on hold. Starting now, you have seven days to address the remaining concerns. <b style="color:#009900">SNUGGUMS</b> (<b style="color:#009900">talk</b> / <b style="color:#009900">edits</b>) 15:42, 23 February 2020 (UTC)


 * I believe I've addressed just about everything. Pi.1415926535 (talk) 20:49, 23 February 2020 (UTC)
 * Just did a bit of minor adjusting, and now the article looks ready to promote. Congratulations! <b style="color:#009900">SNUGGUMS</b> (<b style="color:#009900">talk</b> / <b style="color:#009900">edits</b>) 02:08, 24 February 2020 (UTC)