Talk:J Balvin/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Amitchell125 (talk · contribs) 15:45, 5 March 2021 (UTC)

Happy to review this article - my apologies that you have had to wait so long!

Review - Lead section / infobox

 * Unlink "Prince of Reggaeton".
 * It’s not clear that New York is referring to the state.
 * I would amend Energia to 'the album Energia'.
 * Link Spanish (Spanish language ); eclectic (Eclecticism in art).
 * I would amend Time magazine's annual list of the 100 most influential people of the world to 'Time 100'.
 * You need to reduce the lead section, as it has 5 paragraphs for an article of 4500 words – the recommended length for an article this size is one or two paragraphs (see MOS:LEADLENGTH).
 * Duplicate links to remove (DptoR) – Bad Bunny; Cardi B

Review - section 1

 * 1.1 1985–2013 Early life and career beginnings
 * Link economist; reggaeton; DJ; freestyle battle (Freestyle_rap).
 * Unlink Hollywood (as it is within a quote).
 * Unlink New York City (MOS:OVERLINK).
 * There is an amount of trivia in this section that needs to be omitted—about his employment record, what happened to the family after his father went bankrupt, etc.
 * You need to remove redundant words in this section, to help with the quality of the prose (fast friends (friends); rock groups such as Metallica and Nirvana (Metallica and Nirvana); further study (study); various jobs (jobs); ultimately decided to return (returned); began performing (performed); various urban clubs (clubs); the prestigious EAFIT University (EAFIT University); seriously pursue (persue); their own music (their music). I am assuming this comment applies to the whole article, but I'll leave the task of identifying the redundant terms to you.
 * Consider reducing the title to 'Early life and career'.


 * 1.2 2014–16 "6AM" success and La Familia
 * a night of partying – 'an all-night party' sounds better imo.
 * Shortly after is too vague.
 * 1,757,370,680 views (Aug 29, 2014), not ‘over one billion’ – there is a difference! The information here needs to be up-to-date (and with a date included).
 * I would start a new paragraph after J Balvin has been featured’, as the information preceding it is all about one song.
 * and establishing itself as an international artist needs copy editing.
 * I would consider where he dedicated the award to his home country of Colombia too trivial to include.
 * In June 2015, it was announced – by whom?
 * Who is Donald Trump?
 * inflammatory comments insulting illegal immigrants contains “value-laden” words (see MOS:LABEL) and needs intext attribution (WP:INTEXT) to avoid it sounding editorial.
 * During [Trump's] presidential campaign… —did J Balvin actually says these words, I can't seem to find the quote.
 * national mainstream television – US mainstream television, I assume?
 * Consider reducing the title to 'Early success'.


 * 1.3 2016–17: Energia
 * DltoR – French Montana.
 * Link Premios Juventud; SoundCloud; National Hispanic Heritage Month.
 * Since then, the video has racked up over 807 million views – this needs amending (see MOS:RELTIME).
 * Guinness World Record has italics.
 * "with its deliciously liquid beat, ["Ginza"] among the finest three minutes in reggaetón history." - should read ‘the provocative "Ginza," with its deliciously liquid beat, is among the finest three minutes in reggaetón history.’ It would save me time if you double checked through the other quotes, as they have to be completely accurate.
 * He launched 3 hit singles – this follows a sentence with 4 people listed, you need to clarify who ‘He’ is.
 * Energia Tour or 'Energia tour'?
 * with several special guests – why not simply say ‘guests’?
 * appeared as a surprise for fans – any reason why?
 * That same year – what year is being referred to here?
 * "Love is the Name." - misplaced full stop.
 * He launched – specifiy who ‘He’ is.
 * I would make it clear who/what Buchanan's Whiskey is.
 * Link a cappella (which may not be spelt correctly in the article).
 * Consider amending the title to 'Energia'.

Hi, as you can see, there's a long list of issues to address here already, with only the lead section and section 1 reviewed (and I haven't checked any citations yet). Can I ask you to make a start on addressing my comments, and perhaps adding ✅ (✅) after each one when it's done?

More comments to follow. It's always good to review an article with its own music to listen to at the same time :) Amitchell125 (talk) 16:07, 16 March 2021 (UTC)


 * Hi, I have not heard from you yet, and you seem to have semi-retired. I'm putting the review on hold for a week until 27 March to allow you to respond to the above comments. The article will be failed if they are not done by then. Amitchell125 (talk) 16:39, 20 March 2021 (UTC)