Talk:Jack Stivetts/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 14:43, 26 June 2013 (UTC)

I'll review this article shortly. I'll be using an extra template or two as I'm guiding another user on how to review, so this may have a bit of extra information that the article writer won't need to worry about. Wizardman 14:43, 26 June 2013 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * Any prose issues will be noted below.
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * A caption for the infobox picture would be beneficial, but not a requirement.
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * A caption for the infobox picture would be beneficial, but not a requirement.
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:

Here are the issues I found:
 * "in minor league baseball (MiLB)" the abbreviation can be removed since it's not used later in the article.
 * "He led the AA in earned run average (ERA) in his first MLB," in his first MLB what?
 * " two of which he won more than 30." two in which fits a little better.
 * You have the ERA and AA spelled and abbreviated in early life, but since you do both in the lead it doesn't need to be repeated.
 * "his father in coal mining trade." in the coal
 * "Comiskey was impressed by the velocity of Stivetts' pitched," needs slight rewording.
 * "Stivetts was the team's opening day starting pitcher." not required, but linking to the Cardinals' opening day starters article would be nice here. Same for this one later on.
 * The start of the 1892 season goes into a bit much detail on the rest of the team. Trim it a little bit if you can.
 * "The regular season for the Beaneaters closed on October 15, with a" comma not needed.
 * "Several rule changes were impletement before the" were implemented
 * "he pitched Boston to 12–10 victory against the Spiders" Boston to a
 * "Stivetts (a Protestant)" early life has him as a Lutheran, and while I get the relation lay readers may be more confused, so keep consistent.
 * "Boston re-signed Stivetts for $2100" $2,100
 * "the Boston manager Selee, sent Stivetts home" no comma needed here

I will put the article on hold for a week and will pass when the issues are fixed. Wizardman 00:12, 27 June 2013 (UTC)


 * Thank you very much for taking the time to review this. I "implemented" each of your remarks :) If you see anything else, please let me know. Neonblak talk  -  09:01, 27 June 2013 (UTC)
 * Not a problem. Everything looks good now, so I'll pass the article. Wizardman  16:40, 27 June 2013 (UTC)