Talk:Jacobus Capitein/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: AirshipJungleman29 (talk · contribs) 15:46, 7 October 2022 (UTC)

I will take this review. Initial impressions are favourable. AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 15:46, 7 October 2022 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


 * 1) Is it well written?
 * A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
 * B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:
 * 1) Is it verifiable with no original research?
 * A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
 * B. All in-line citations are from reliable sources, including those for direct quotations, statistics, published opinion, counter-intuitive or controversial statements that are challenged or likely to be challenged, and contentious material relating to living persons&mdash;science-based articles should follow the scientific citation guidelines:
 * C. It contains no original research:
 * D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
 * B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
 * 1) Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * , this is an excellent article. One or two minor points: 1) should the school Capitein established at Elmina be mentioned in the "Return to Africa" section; 2) there were several duplicate links which I have fixed; 3) the lead section is slightly repetitive and could be smoothened. Otherwise, well done. AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 18:34, 8 October 2022 (UTC)
 * , Thanks for reviewing another article of mine. In regards to your first point, I agree that the section as it stood would probably fit better in the "Return to Africa" section, but I feel that the bit about Capitein's school and orphanage was better placed in the legacy section, as it was the only tangible legacy that he left in Elmina. I have reworded the section to make this obvious. In regards to your second point, I am unsure as to what exactly is repetitive about the lede section. Perhaps if you gave me a list of things to fix then I could do that easily. Regards, Dabberoni15 (talk) 23:40, 9 October 2022 (UTC)
 * Hmm. My initial feeling was that the second sentence of the lead was unnecessary. However, on reading it again, I think it's satisfactory for GA standard, although it would get noticed at FA. Congratulations,, I'll promote it now. AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 10:34, 10 October 2022 (UTC)
 * It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
 * 1) Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * , this is an excellent article. One or two minor points: 1) should the school Capitein established at Elmina be mentioned in the "Return to Africa" section; 2) there were several duplicate links which I have fixed; 3) the lead section is slightly repetitive and could be smoothened. Otherwise, well done. AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 18:34, 8 October 2022 (UTC)
 * , Thanks for reviewing another article of mine. In regards to your first point, I agree that the section as it stood would probably fit better in the "Return to Africa" section, but I feel that the bit about Capitein's school and orphanage was better placed in the legacy section, as it was the only tangible legacy that he left in Elmina. I have reworded the section to make this obvious. In regards to your second point, I am unsure as to what exactly is repetitive about the lede section. Perhaps if you gave me a list of things to fix then I could do that easily. Regards, Dabberoni15 (talk) 23:40, 9 October 2022 (UTC)
 * Hmm. My initial feeling was that the second sentence of the lead was unnecessary. However, on reading it again, I think it's satisfactory for GA standard, although it would get noticed at FA. Congratulations,, I'll promote it now. AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 10:34, 10 October 2022 (UTC)
 * , this is an excellent article. One or two minor points: 1) should the school Capitein established at Elmina be mentioned in the "Return to Africa" section; 2) there were several duplicate links which I have fixed; 3) the lead section is slightly repetitive and could be smoothened. Otherwise, well done. AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 18:34, 8 October 2022 (UTC)
 * , Thanks for reviewing another article of mine. In regards to your first point, I agree that the section as it stood would probably fit better in the "Return to Africa" section, but I feel that the bit about Capitein's school and orphanage was better placed in the legacy section, as it was the only tangible legacy that he left in Elmina. I have reworded the section to make this obvious. In regards to your second point, I am unsure as to what exactly is repetitive about the lede section. Perhaps if you gave me a list of things to fix then I could do that easily. Regards, Dabberoni15 (talk) 23:40, 9 October 2022 (UTC)
 * Hmm. My initial feeling was that the second sentence of the lead was unnecessary. However, on reading it again, I think it's satisfactory for GA standard, although it would get noticed at FA. Congratulations,, I'll promote it now. AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 10:34, 10 October 2022 (UTC)