Talk:Jade Etherington/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Hawkeye7 (talk · contribs) 11:05, 31 March 2014 (UTC)

Greetings. I shall be your reviewer. A review will be posted soon. Hawkeye7 (talk) 11:05, 31 March 2014 (UTC)
 * Thank you . Mat  ty  .  007  11:13, 31 March 2014 (UTC)


 * 1) Let's start with the glaringly obvious. Her guide is Caroline Powell, not Catherine Powell. Change the first instance in the lead, link it, and remove the bold, and unlink the second instance.
 * Fixed. Mat  ty  .  007
 * 1) Put her full name and birth date in "Personal". The body and text should be able to stand separate.
 * Sorry, forgot. Done. Mat  ty  .  007
 * 1) Link Caroline Powell here too
 * Done. Mat  ty  .  007
 * 1) Since you mention that she was inspired by the 2012 Summer Olympics, you might also mention that She carried the Olympic torch through Lincoln as part of the torch relay for the 2012 Olympic Games in London from source 2
 * Added. Thanks, Mat  ty  .  007  09:45, 1 April 2014 (UTC)
 * 1) She describes her sight as "very blurry with little focus" suggest vision instead of sight
 * Done. Mat  ty  .  007
 * 1) Can you incorporate this from source 6? Jade was born with glaucoma and the genetic eye condition Axenfeld syndrome, which she inherited from her mother Amber, who is blind. This information is in the categories but not the article.
 * Axenfeld syndrome was already in 'Personal history', but I added glaucoma. Mat  ty  .  007
 * 1) I'd include this as well: Andrew, then a London stockbroker, and Amber, who worked for Braintree District Council. They lived in The Causeway, Maldon, before moving to Lincolnshire, when Jade was seven. This information is also in the categories but not the article.
 * Done. Mat  ty  .  007
 * 1) Her original success at Europa cup and IPC alpine skiing events Can you spell out International Paralympic Committee (IPC) in full? Not everybody is familiar with the abbreviation.
 * Done. Mat  ty  .  007
 * 1) Molina should be La Molina in both the text and the info box.
 * Changed. Mat  ty  .  007
 * 1) Etherington and Powell began skiing together in August 2013,[10] and the pair qualified for the 2013 IPC Alpine Skiing World Championships in Molina, representing Great Britain. At Molina Etherington came fourth in the women's slalom and medaled in the women's Super-G, taking bronze.[1] Aaargh no. As detailed in Source 6, Jade skiied in LaMolina with John Clarke, Heather Mills's coach. La Molina was in March 2013. Jade started skiing with Powell in August 2013.
 * Thanks for catching that, fixed. Mat  ty  .  007
 * 1) despite rupturing her ovarian cyst Suggest "an ovarian cyst" Not everybody has one.
 * Done. Mat  ty  .  007
 * I took the liberty of cropping the pic.

Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:15, 31 March 2014 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review, attempted fix of all issues. Mat  ty  .  007  09:45, 1 April 2014 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


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