Talk:Jaidynn Diore Fierce/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 22:47, 9 March 2024 (UTC)

Things look fine. Some copy cleanup. The discography is unreferenced and should probably be binned. Ping me when done. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 23:32, 9 March 2024 (UTC)


 * Thanks for reviewing. I had not included another citation in the Discography section since the claim was sourced in the article body, but I've re-used the citation. No problem with outright deletion if you feel the section is not necessary. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 23:40, 9 March 2024 (UTC)

Copy changes

 * Consider a lead that is maybe one to two sentences longer to more adequately summarize the article.
 * Christopher Williams was born in the U.S. state of Tennessee, and raised in a Christian household. He graduated from high school in Nashville, and attended his first drag show at Play Dance Bar in 2007, on the night of his graduation. The commas in the two bolded sections should be removed (WP:CINS)
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 23:42, 9 March 2024 (UTC)
 * Jaidynn Diore Fierce eliminated two contestants from the competition, and placed eighth overall Remove comma (CinS)
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 23:42, 9 March 2024 (UTC)
 * Michael Cook of Out In Jersey called her the "true heart" of the season, and said she had an "infectious" personality.
 * Removed comma. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 23:42, 9 March 2024 (UTC)
 * She participated in a drag show to raise funds for Puerto Rico residents impacted by the destruction of Hurricane Maria in 2017, and headlined the University of Wisconsin–Milwaukee's nineteenth annual drag show in 2018. Another unneeded comma
 * ✅ --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 23:42, 9 March 2024 (UTC)
 * The discography is unsourced and may need to be removed altogether.
 * See above comment. --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 23:42, 9 March 2024 (UTC)

Sourcing and spot checks

 * 3: Speaking out against bills in Tennessee. Mentions that Jaidynn, who was born in Tennessee and continues to work in the state... ✅
 * 7: Snatch Game recap: Jaidynn Diore Fierce channeled Raven-Symoné’s signature look ... over and over again ✅
 * 9: While she also didn't win any maxi challenges, Jaidynn showed promise before becoming a lip sync assassin, sending home two queens consecutively before being sent home herself by Ginger Minj. Jaidynn continues to perform drag shows and has a drag daughter called Venus Ann Serena. ✅
 * 18: WTVF article: Far from the world in which they grew up, drag queens Venus Ann Serena and Sapphire Mylan call the stage home. ... The two perform across the country along with their drag sister Jaidynn Diore Fierce ✅
 * 25: Jaidynn Diore Fierce will host an LGBTQ+ trivia night fundraiser Probably not SIGCOV, but for her doing it, that's about the only citable thing there is. ✅

Earwig flags the Pride.com quote, which is correct and correctly attributed.
 * --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 23:43, 9 March 2024 (UTC)

Images
Thank goodness for DVSROSS. All three check out as having been CC-licensed from Flickr. Alt text is adequate.
 * --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 23:43, 9 March 2024 (UTC)


 * I think I've addressed your concerns. Thanks again for reviewing! I've nominated 8 or so similar drag queen bios, if you're interested. Happy editing! --- Another Believer ( Talk ) 23:44, 9 March 2024 (UTC)