Talk:Jake Arrieta/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Muboshgu (talk · contribs) 23:59, 19 March 2016 (UTC)

I can review this. – Muboshgu (talk) 23:59, 19 March 2016 (UTC)

Okay, section by section...
 * Lead
 * Too short. A lead should be a comprehensive summary of the article's contents. Outside of the first sentence, this one only focuses on 2015.
 * There are six citations backing up the last fact in the lead. That is citation overkill. Per WP:LEADCITE, there shouldn't be citations in the lead, since all facts mentioned in the lead should be mentioned and cited in the article body. Bob Gibson is currently mentioned in the lead, but not the body.


 * Amateur career
 * He was born in MO, but went to school in TX. Can we add why? An "early life" section can detail his parents, siblings, etc., and the reason they moved.
 * TCU abbreviation needs to be introduced after the first usage of Texas Christian University, like this "Texas Christian University (TCU)", before it can be used.
 * The college stats end after his sophomore year. What happened in his junior year?


 * Professional career
 * It's not particularly clear that his season in Frederick was the 2008 season, until getting to the end of the sentence. Also, the 2008 Summer Olympics are linked for the second time here, when it only needs to be linked once.
 * Nothing is mentioned about 2009, or the beginning of his 2010 season. 2011 is barely mentioned, just that he started the Orioles' home opener, and the sentence then continues into 2012. Each season needs at least one sentence to describe what happened.
 * The Orioles paragraph is not enough to cover 2010 through 2013. It needs expansion.
 * "As of September 24, 2014, ..." We should have a full season update.
 * Obviously his 2015 season was yuuuge. It should be commented on more than the others. But, this seems a bit excessive. Now that 2015 is over, it should be trimmed for anything seeming to be related to WP:RECENTISM.
 * His 2016 salary is mentioned as a record for second-time arbitration players. What did he earn in his first time in arbitration?


 * Personal life
 * Could also use some expansion. How did he and his wife meet, for example?

That's a start. If I see anything else I'll add it. I'll put the article on hold for now to allow for improvements. – Muboshgu (talk) 01:12, 26 March 2016 (UTC)

No work done in over a week, I will now fail this article. Hopefully someone (possibly myself) improves the article based on the above. – Muboshgu (talk) 19:46, 4 April 2016 (UTC)