Talk:Jake the Dog (Adventure Time episode)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Seabuckthorn (talk · contribs) 01:55, 8 January 2014 (UTC)

Nominator: Gen. Quon   (Talk)

Hi! I'll be reviewing this article for GA status, and should have my full review up shortly. -- Seabuckthorn   ♥  01:55, 8 January 2014 (UTC)

1: Well-written
 * a. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:.
 * b. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

Check for WP:LEAD:


 * 1) Check for Correct Structure of Lead Section:  ✅
 * 2) Check for Citations (WP:LEADCITE):  ✅
 * 3) Check for Introductory text:  ✅
 * 4) * Check for Provide an accessible overview (MOS:INTRO): ✅
 * 5) ** Major Point 1: Plot "The series follows the adventures of Finn ... Thus, the world is righted again." (not a concise summary of the Plot section, must be more clear and concise.)
 * 6) ** Major Point 2: Production "The episode was written and ... Cloris Leachman as Farmworld Marceline." (not a concise summary of the Production section, few important points like the music composer Tim Kiefer are not in the lead.)
 * 7) ** Major Point 3: Reception ""Jake the Dog" was watched by 3.435 million viewers and received largely positive critical acclaim, with many critics writing that the episode was both humorous and a creative challenge." (not a concise summary of the Reception section)
 * 8) * Check for Relative emphasis: ✅
 * 9) ** Major Point 1: Plot "The series follows the adventures of Finn ... Thus, the world is righted again." (the lead gives due weight as is given in the body)
 * 10) ** Major Point 2: Production "The episode was written and ... Cloris Leachman as Farmworld Marceline." (the lead gives due weight as is given in the body)
 * 11) ** Major Point 3: Reception ""Jake the Dog" was watched by 3.435 million viewers and received largely positive critical acclaim, with many critics writing that the episode was both humorous and a creative challenge." (the lead does not give due weight as is given in the body)
 * 12) * Check for Opening paragraph (MOS:BEGIN): ✅
 * 13) ** Check for First sentence (WP:LEADSENTENCE): ✅
 * 14) *** "Jake the Dog" is the second episode of the fifth season of the American animated television series Adventure Time.
 * 15) ** Check for Format of the first sentence (MOS:BOLDTITLE): ✅
 * 16) ** Check for Proper names and titles: ✅
 * 17) ** Check for Abbreviations and synonyms (MOS:BOLDSYN): None
 * 18) ** Check for Foreign language (MOS:FORLANG): None
 * 19) ** Check for Pronunciation: None
 * 20) ** Check for Contextual links (MOS:CONTEXTLINK): ✅
 * 21) ** Check for Biographies: NA
 * 22) ** Check for Organisms: NA
 * 23) Check for Biographies of living persons:  NA
 * 24) Check for Alternative names (MOS:LEADALT):  ✅
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 * 28) Check for Length (WP:LEADLENGTH):  ✅
 * 29) Check for Clutter (WP:LEADCLUTTER):  None

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 * 1) Check for Body sections: WP:BODY, MOS:BODY.  ✅
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 * 4) * Check for Paragraphs (MOS:PARAGRAPHS): ✅
 * 5) ** Paragraphs should be short enough to be readable, but long enough to develop an idea. (WP:BETTER)
 * 6) ** Fix ""Jake the Dog" first aired on Cartoon Network ... "Finn the Human". the episode ... at the time of the airing." in the Reception section. There is also a 1a issue: the should be The.
 * 7) Check for Standard appendices and footers (MOS:APPENDIX):  ✅
 * 8) * Check for Order of sections (WP:ORDER): ✅
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 * 10) * Check for See also section (MOS:SEEALSO): None
 * 11) * Check for Notes and references (WP:FNNR): ✅
 * 12) * Check for Further reading (WP:FURTHER): None
 * 13) * Check for External links (WP:LAYOUTEL): None
 * 14) * Check for Links to sister projects: None
 * 15) * Check for Navigation templates: ✅
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 * 19) * Check for Horizontal rule (WP:LINE): ✅

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Check for WP:WTW: ✅


 * 1) Check for Words that may introduce bias:  ✅
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 * 5) * Check for Expressions of doubt (WP:ALLEGED): ✅
 * 6) * Check for Editorializing (MOS:OPED): ✅
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 * 10) * Check for Clichés and idioms (WP:IDIOM): ✅
 * 11) * Check for Relative time references (WP:REALTIME): ✅
 * 12) * Check for Neologisms (WP:PEA): None
 * 13) Check for Offensive material (WP:F***):  None

Check for WP:MOSFICT: ✅


 * 1) Check for Real-world perspective (WP:Real world):  ✅
 * 2) * Check for Primary and secondary information (WP:PASI): ✅
 * 3) * Check for Contextual presentation (MOS:PLOT): ✅

None


 * Prose is preferred over list (WP:PROSE):
 * Check for Tables (MOS:TABLES):

2: Verifiable with no original research
 * a. Has an appropriate reference section: Yes
 * b. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:

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Check for WP:RS: ✅


 * 1) Check for the material (WP:RSVETTING):  (not contentious) ✅
 * 2) * Is it contentious?: No
 * 3) * Does the ref indeed support the material?:
 * 4) Check for the author (WP:RSVETTING):  ✅
 * 5) * Who is the author?:
 * 6) ** Seibert, Fred (Frederator Studios)
 * 7) ** Sava, Oliver (The Onion)
 * 8) ** Larry Leichliter (Cartoon Network)
 * 9) ** Adventure Time production staff (Tumblr)
 * 10) ** Stopera, Dave (BuzzFeed)
 * 11) ** Moynihan, Jesse (JesseMoynihan.com)
 * 12) ** Kiefer, Tim (NastySonix)
 * 13) ** Bibel, Sara (Zap2it)
 * 14) ** Kohn, Eric (Snagfilms)
 * 15) * Does the author have a Wikipedia article?:
 * 16) * What are the author's academic credentials and professional experience?:
 * 17) * What else has the author published?:
 * 18) * Is the author, or this work, cited in other reliable sources? In academic works?:
 * 19) Check for the publication (WP:RSVETTING):  ✅
 * 20) * Frederator Studios
 * 21) * The Onion
 * 22) * Cartoon Network
 * 23) * Tumblr
 * 24) * BuzzFeed
 * 25) * JesseMoynihan.com by Jesse Moynihan
 * 26) * NastySonix
 * 27) * Zap2it
 * 28) * Snagfilms
 * 29) Check for Self-published sources (WP:SPS):

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Check for inline citations WP:MINREF: ✅


 * 1) Check for Direct quotations:  ✅
 * 2) * "inter-dimensional travel" ... [8] (Check on source 8, successful, "Given all the inter-dimensional travel in the episode, ...")
 * 3) * "I threw my own music from the Season 2 finale 'Mortal Folly / Mortal Recoil' on my turntables and went wild – pitching, reversing, rewinding, scratching and more – transforming Jake’s 'Lil’ Booty Dance' bongo song into a booming, merry-go-round dance celebration."[8] (Check on source 8, successful, "... I threw my own music from the Season 2 finale “Mortal Folly / Mortal Recoil" on my turntables and went wild - pitching, reversing, rewinding, scratching and more - transforming Jake’s "Lil’ Booty Dance" bongo song into a booming, merry-go-round dance celebration.")
 * 4) * "a dense première that evokes nearly all aspects of this series."[3] (Check on source 3, successful, "... and the result is a dense première that evokes nearly all aspects of this series.")
 * 5) * "on humor and relationships" ... [3] (Check on source 3, successful, "The Dog is more focused on humor and relationships, ...")
 * 6) * "irreverent silly note[s]" ... [3] (Check on source 3, successful, " Jake says, ending the episode on an irreverent silly note after an intense story.")
 * 7) * "irreverent and narratively engaging".[10] (Check on source 10, successful, "... more clearly represents the progress of the medium: Irreverent and narratively engaging, ...")
 * 8) * "the ideal testament to animation's glorious pliability in an commercial arena otherwise defined by restrictions."[10] (Check on source 10, successful, "... it's the ideal testament to animation's glorious pliability in an commercial arena otherwise defined by restrictions.")
 * 9) * "sad subtext" ... [10] (Check on source 10, successful, "... toys with an incredibly sad subtext: The world has been destroyed in something called The Great Mushroom War.")
 * 10) * "deny the bad vibes their surrounding world invites" ... [10] (Check on source 10, successful, "Through friendship and playtime, the characters seemingly deny the bad vibes their surrounding world invites.")
 * 11) * "cheery songs and vibrant artwork" were some of the series strongest points.[10] (Check on source 10, successful, "The cheery songs and vibrant artwork remain sincere while challenging the backdrop at the same time.")
 * 12) * "interesting creative challenge".[10] (Check on source 10, successful, " provided an interesting creative challenge for Ward and his team: a prolonged running time of half an hour, which basically amounted to a double episode.")
 * 13) Check for Likely to be challenged:  ✅
 * 14) Check for Contentious material about living persons (WP:BLP):  NA


 * c. No original research: ✅

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 * 1) Check for primary sources (WP:PRIMARY):  ✅
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3: Broad in its coverage

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 * 7) Check for All material that a reader would be likely to agree matches the specified scope is covered:
 * 8) Check for The most general scope that summarises essentially all knowledge:
 * 9) Check for Stay on topic and no wandering off-topic (WP:OFFTOPIC):

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 * 1) Check for Readability issues (WP:LENGTH):
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4: Neutral

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4. Fair representation without bias: ✅


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 * 10) Check for Words to watch (WP:YESPOV):  ✅
 * 11) Check for Attributing and specifying biased statements (WP:ATTRIBUTEPOV):  ✅
 * 12) Check for Fringe theories and pseudoscience (WP:PSCI):  None
 * 13) Check for Religion (WP:RNPOV):  None

5: Stable: No edit wars, etc: Yes

6: Images ✅ (Creative Commons Attribution-Share Alike 3.0 Unported license)

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6: Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content: ✅


 * 1) Check for copyright tags (WP:TAGS):  ✅
 * 2) * Image 1 (ClorisLeachmanJune09.jpg): This file is licensed under the Creative Commons Attribution-Share Alike 3.0 Unported license. This version permits free use, including commercial use. Hence this image complies with ''The license must permit both commercial reuse and derivative works.
 * 3) * Image 2 (M Emmet Walsh at the 2009 Tribeca Film Festival.jpg): This file is licensed under the Creative Commons Attribution-Share Alike 3.0 Unported license. This version permits free use, including commercial use. Hence this image complies with ''The license must permit both commercial reuse and derivative works.
 * 4) Check for copyright status:  ✅
 * 5) * Image 1 (ClorisLeachmanJune09.jpg): Free.
 * 6) * Image 2 (M Emmet Walsh at the 2009 Tribeca Film Festival.jpg): Free.
 * 7) Check for non-free content (WP:NFC):  None
 * 8) Check for valid fair use rationales (WP:FUR):  NA

6: Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions: ✅


 * 1) Check for image relevance (WP:IMAGE RELEVANCE):  ✅
 * 2) * Image 1 (ClorisLeachmanJune09.jpg): Relevant.
 * 3) * Image 2 (M Emmet Walsh at the 2009 Tribeca Film Festival.jpg): Relevant.
 * 4) Check for Images for the lead (WP:LEADIMAGE):  None
 * 5) Check for suitable captions (WP:CAPTION):  ✅
 * 6) * Caption: "The episode guest starred Cloris Leachman (left) and M. Emmet Walsh (right) among others." succinct and informative

As per the above checklist, the issues identified are:
 * The lead does not provide an accessible overview. Major Points like the Plot, the Production and the Reception are not the concise summaries of their respective sections.
 * The lead does not give relative emphasis to the Reception as is given in the body.
 * Paragraphs should be long enough to develop an idea. Fix short paragraphs.

This article is a very promising GA nominee. I'm glad to see your work here. I'm putting the article on hold. All the best! -- Seabuckthorn   ♥  14:42, 10 January 2014 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review. How do these changes look?-- Gen. Quon   (Talk)   02:13, 11 January 2014 (UTC)
 * It's concise and good now.

OK, everything looks good now. Passing the article to GA status. -- Seabuckthorn   ♥  02:50, 11 January 2014 (UTC)