Talk:Jakob Nacken/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 14:53, 16 April 2020 (UTC)

Comments
 * Lead needs to be expanded about two-to-three-fold.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 12:32, 17 April 2020 (UTC)


 * "(1906 – 1987)" but you have the actual dates in the article?
 * ✅ - corrected. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:55, 17 April 2020 (UTC)


 * Be consistent with date formats throughout the article, DMY or MDY...
 * ✅ - MDY. Doug Coldwell (talk) 12:42, 17 April 2020 (UTC)


 * Could link Freak show for "circus curiosity"?
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 12:43, 17 April 2020 (UTC)


 * "soldier of the German Army" in, not of.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 12:48, 17 April 2020 (UTC)


 * "His parents were six feet " do you mean "Both his parents were six feet tall"?
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 13:29, 17 April 2020 (UTC)


 * Do you mean, specifically, Luna Park, Paris?
 * ✅ = yes! Thanks. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 13:34, 17 April 2020 (UTC)


 * "German army. He was the German Army's tallest soldier" army or Army? And merge these probably, to "German Army, becoming their tallest soldier."
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 13:41, 17 April 2020 (UTC)


 * And is that tallest ever or tallest at the time?
 * ✅ = ever. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 13:47, 17 April 2020 (UTC)


 * "as Prisoners of War and" no need for that capitalization.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 13:50, 17 April 2020 (UTC)

sentence unreferenced?
 * " States[11] because he wanted to leave bombed-out post-war Germany. " odd ref placement, move to end of sentence. Is the latter part of the
 * ✅ Corrected - should have been at end of sentence.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 13:57, 17 April 2020 (UTC)


 * I would also remove "bombed-out" too as that's a little unencyclopedic.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 13:59, 17 April 2020 (UTC)


 * "giant Santa Claus." for whom?
 * ✅ - for companies and organizations. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:06, 17 April 2020 (UTC)


 * His height isn't mentioned in the main prose, just the lead and infobox.
 * ✅ added into main prose. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:11, 17 April 2020 (UTC)


 * " Ripley's Believe It or Not! " is normally italicised.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:16, 17 April 2020 (UTC)


 * "at Brussels, " in, not at.
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:18, 17 April 2020 (UTC)


 * "five feet eight inches tall" you converted the others to metres...
 * ✅ - convert template added. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:23, 17 April 2020 (UTC)


 * " December 16, 1955.[19][22][23] " three refs needed for this one fact?
 * ✅ - corrected to only one ref.--Doug Coldwell (talk)

That's all I have on a quick run through. On hold. Cheers. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 11:02, 17 April 2020 (UTC)
 * - all issues addressed. Can you take another look at it. Thanks. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 14:31, 17 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Hey Doug, happy with the changes above so I'm promoting. Good work. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 09:07, 18 April 2020 (UTC)