Talk:James Ferguson (Scottish politician)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Khazar2 (talk · contribs) 23:00, 19 March 2013 (UTC)

Hi Phil, I'll be glad to take this one. Initial comments to follow soon--thanks in advance for your hard work. -- Khazar2 (talk) 23:00, 19 March 2013 (UTC)
 * Congrats, by the way, on your "Editor of the Week" award! -- Khazar2 (talk) 23:11, 19 March 2013 (UTC)
 * I'm still floating on air about that! I keep checking no one has taken the box off my page!

Initial comments
This looks solid on first pass, though I haven't had a chance to consult the sources much yet. Will fill out the checklist a bit later. Only two initial questions:


 * "carried off without a struggle by Apoplexy" -- the quotation marks imply this is an exact quotation, but the source's wording is "It was ‘apoplexy’ which carried him off ‘without a struggle’ in September 1820". Perhaps change to just "He was said to have died "without a struggle" of "apoplexy".
 * "much of the policies " -- should this be "many of the policies"? I'm not familiar with "the policies" used in this way (I'm American) so it may just be my own ignorance showing. -- Khazar2 (talk) 23:37, 19 March 2013 (UTC)

This fact should be added to the body as well as the lead per WP:LEAD:
 * "He studied law in Edinburgh, qualifying in 1757 to gain membership of the faculty of Advocates." -- Khazar2 (talk) 23:58, 19 March 2013 (UTC)

I also made a few minor edits as I went--please feel free to revert anything with which you disagree. -- Khazar2 (talk) 00:21, 20 March 2013 (UTC)


 * Thank you! I've adjusted all of the above - I hope I'm completing this 'form' correctly and that I haven't managed to break it! Any other comments you have will be very much appreciated.  SagaciousPhil   -  Chat  10:25, 20 March 2013 (UTC)