Talk:James L. Brooks/GA1

GA Review
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I am so sorry for the delay in the review. I put my name down a while ago to review the article and completely forgot until now. Overall, it's a great article and I only have a few queries and minor issues to raise. I'll place the nomination on hold, so you have a week to make changes or address any queries. Good luck :) — 97198 (talk) 10:49, 5 October 2009 (UTC)
 * In the lead, mention the release years of Say Anything... and Bottle Rocket so the reader gets an idea of where these slot into the rest of his career.
 * His parents, Dorothy and Edward Brooks were both Jewish salespeople (his mother sold children's clothes, his father furniture) - there should be a comma after his parents' names and a semi-colon instead of a comma after "clothes".
 * to together with MTM Productions create a series for his wife Mary Tyler Moore - kind of clunky; maybe switch the word order to "to create a series together with MTV Productions". Also unclear whose wife Mary Tyler Moore is.
 * which generated it high ratings - makes better sense as just "which generated high ratings".
 * NBC picked it up, but the ratings remained low and dropped it after one season - "it was dropped after one season".
 * it won three straight Outstanding Comedy Series Emmys - "three consecutive", maybe?
 * Give some kind of time frame for Brooks' work on The Associates, just for clarity.
 * He channelled this ambivalence into Broadcast News - personally, I don't see the need to wikilink ambivalence here.
 * Again, in the last paragraph of "Film", give years for Say Anything..., Jerry Maguire and Bottle Rocket.
 * Ref #15 leads to a legit but blank page on the Fox Flash site.
 * Ref #26 seems to be missing attribution to The New York Times.

All done. Thanks very much. Gran2 16:17, 5 October 2009 (UTC)
 * Well done. All the changes look good, so I'll go ahead and pass the article. — 97198 (talk) 14:11, 6 October 2009 (UTC)