Talk:James Milner/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: IronManCap (talk · contribs) 21:27, 2 September 2021 (UTC)

Hi, I'm interested in taking up this review. For initial comments, some ref work in adding dates and authors to refs is needed; the ProveIt gadget may be helpful here. Also look at archiving all urls using IABot, and find refs for the two tags in the infobox. Expect further comments in the next 7 days.
 * ✅ have addressed the 2 tags.

Lead

 * Move ref #7 next to ref #174 in #Style of play per MOS:LEADCITE ✅
 * - as who used him (managers, presumably) haven't been mentioned ✅
 * - mention the specific school here ✅
 * Not sure him being a Leeds season ticket holder is notable enough for the lead, I would cut that ✅
 * I would also merge the sentences about him supporting Leeds and joining their academy ✅
 * - rm "only" per WP:VOICE ✅
 * Add "award" after ✅
 * Link to Free transfer (association football) and link  to Vice-captain (association football) ✅

Early life

 * - Link Yorkshire ✅

Club career

 * One BBC source doesn't justify "widespread praise from commentators" - I would remove "widespread" at the bare minimum ✅
 * - who? ✅
 * Preferably remove instances of "even" per WP:VOICE ✅
 * "Winger" should not be capitalised ✅
 * "Winger" should not be capitalised ✅


 * - needs a source ✅ I have removed it as, after a look I feel it is adequately covered in the paragraph below.


 * Move the second image (the free kick one) to the left so it faces the text per MOS:IMAGELOCATION ✅
 * Also link free kick and Newcastle United in the caption per WP:DUPLINK ✅
 * Add commas after and  ✅
 * - rm "highly" per MOS:PUFFERY / WP:VOICE ✅
 * - replace "he" with "Milner" ✅
 * Link transfer request ✅


 * This sentence needs c/e and some commas, potentially split it out ✅
 * Link free kick in #Aston Villa, delink in #Style of play. ✅


 * Man City section is well-written.


 * Link Roma. ✅
 * Add "season" after ✅
 * Reword the opening sentence of the last para of the L'pool section to something like ✅
 * Reword the opening sentence of the last para of the L'pool section to something like ✅

International career

 * Add a comma after "2003 World Youth Championship" ✅
 * - "also" is unnecessary here ✅
 * - rm "well" per WP:VOICE ✅


 * - rm "where" ✅
 * - This needs c/e and sourcing
 * The paragraph beginning needs some serious c/e for grammar
 * Any updates on the above two points? They're the last two points to address before this passes GAN. IronManCap (talk) 14:54, 11 September 2021 (UTC)
 * I have addressed these two points myself, and am hence passing the article. IronManCap (talk) 20:08, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Any updates on the above two points? They're the last two points to address before this passes GAN. IronManCap (talk) 14:54, 11 September 2021 (UTC)
 * I have addressed these two points myself, and am hence passing the article. IronManCap (talk) 20:08, 13 September 2021 (UTC)

Style of play

 * I would move the image to the left and quote box to the right so the image faces the text per MOS:IMAGELOCATION and alternates with the last one ✅
 * Link Manuel Pellegrini ✅
 * Add a comma after ✅
 * Rm the colon in the last sentence ✅
 * Rm the colon in the last sentence ✅

Refs

 * Mark The Daily Telegraph and The Times refs with limited ✅
 * Please be consistent if possible with work vs publisher for BBC Sport; the former is preferable per WP:ITALICWEBCITE
 * Please add any missing authors using first, last, and if necessary, author-link

Other comments

 * Career statistics and honours sections look good.
 * Earwig suspects a copyvio of this website, although that is a low-level website that is almost certainly a WP:Wikipedia mirror. It also has weird line breaks within prose, almost certainly to avoid copyvio detection on its part, so no concerns here.
 * I asked about that website before nominating and was told that it shouldn't be a problem. REDMAN 2019  ( talk ) 12:44, 5 September 2021 (UTC)


 * This script found no WP:DUPLINKs.
 * Good to see MOS:NUMBER being followed.

Those are my comments. Ping me when addressed. IronManCap (talk) 13:42, 3 September 2021 (UTC)