Talk:James Sullivan (governor)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Cdtew (talk · contribs) 04:21, 15 February 2013 (UTC)

I definitely want to claim this one. I'll get you my feedback ASAP, although it may be later tomorrow until I'm finished.  Cdtew  (talk) 04:21, 15 February 2013 (UTC)

Sorry for the delay; this article is top-notch, and covers yet another fascinating character from Federal-era Mass. Here are my comments:

Prose

 * I've made some edits, which I've tried to keep discrete; feel free to revert.
 * "and his mother was a child on board the ship he came over on whom he later wooed and wed" - This clause reads a little awkwardly; the profusion of pronouns is a contributing factor Rephrased  Magic ♪piano 22:08, 17 February 2013 (UTC)
 * "in 1773 Sullivan was offered a portion within the tract" - You may want to clarify what the "tract" was you're talking about Rephrased  Magic ♪piano 22:08, 17 February 2013 (UTC)
 * "Although his politics was Democratic-Republican" - This could probably be worded more forthrightly; "his politics was" raises eyebrows; maybe "Although Sullivan leaned toward the Democratic-Republicans..."
 * "framed by Republican ideals. His Republicanism was..." - I think "Republican" and "Republicanism" should be lower-cased in this circumstance, as it sounds like you're talking about philosophical republicanism, not partisanship Done  Magic ♪piano 02:23, 18 February 2013 (UTC)
 * The "Maine–New Brunswick border commission" subsection may need a sentence more background to give the lay reader some more comfort with the subject; as it is now, the background has to be teased out of the context, and even then is vague.
 * I've rephrased this, although I haven't really added anything new. If you think more background is needed, you'll have to give a clearer indication of what you feel is missing.  Magic ♪piano 02:23, 18 February 2013 (UTC)
 * "and spent some time as a captive in an Indian village" - not to be PC, but is there any way you could insert a specific tribe, rather than just an "Indian village"? Done  Magic ♪piano 02:23, 18 February 2013 (UTC)
 * " In 1808, while Sullivan was governor, a small fortification now known as Fort Sullivan was constructed in Calais, Maine." - you fail to indicate whom it was named after
 * This is because (most annoyingly) no sources dealing with it say so. I think it's pretty likely it was named for him, but even its keepers claim not to know, and my opinion is OR at best.  Magic ♪piano 22:08, 17 February 2013 (UTC)
 * Do you have any 3PS's even speculating that it was named after Sullivan? I mean, the likelihood is high it was, but if there's no 3PS connecting the two, I'd say you should leave this fact out, because otherwise it raises the question I posed.  Just my opinion, though.   Cdtew  (talk) 22:14, 17 February 2013 (UTC)
 * I found a source that renders an opinion.  Magic ♪piano 02:23, 18 February 2013 (UTC)

Images

 * The Caleb Strong image is missing a PD tag Fixed  Magic ♪piano 22:08, 17 February 2013 (UTC)
 * The Harrison Gray Otis image doesn't have a valid PD-Art parameter Fixed  Magic ♪piano 22:08, 17 February 2013 (UTC)
 * All other photos check out.

Copyvio/Links/Citations

 * No Dablinks
 * No linkrot or bare URL's

Great job! Just a few minor corrections, and this one's good to go!  Cdtew  (talk) 06:17, 17 February 2013 (UTC)


 * I also found Sullivan unexpectedly fascinating. A real man of action, despite is lameness.  Magic ♪piano 22:08, 17 February 2013 (UTC)
 * Yet another fascinating guy! This on is good to o.  Cdtew  (talk) 02:53, 18 February 2013 (UTC)

Summary

 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail: