Talk:James Warren (politician)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: HumanxAnthro (talk · contribs) 18:56, 2 March 2022 (UTC)

Hello, how are you doing? I rarely edit political articles, although I read them some time, so this should be a good way to expand my range.
 * Any particular reason why the dates in the infobox and the death and birth date in the parenthesis of the lead are formatted differently from the other dates presented? Is it a MOS thing I missed?
 * Altered all dates to be consistent. "Is it a MOS thing I missed?" I'm sorry to say that you (and everyone else on this site) would probably know this better than me; I'm relatively new here :(.
 * What is a "prominent" family? I've looked up that it refers to a family with a lot of members, I do not imagine that is familiar to most readers.
 * Changed to "affluent", which the Warrens were. I meant the word "prominent" more in the sense of Warren being descended from a Mayflower passenger, but I see what you mean.
 * "In 1742, he started attending Harvard College, graduating three years later in 1745 with a Bachelor of Arts degree." To reduce redundancy, I would format it like this: "From 1742 to 1745, he attend Harvard College and graduated with a Bachelor of Arts degree".
 * Done
 * ""developed "strong feelings about how the colonies should be governed."" The period needs to be outside the quote, since it's a partial quote being cited.
 * Done
 * "On 14 November, 1757, Warren married Mercy Otis, the daughter of James Otis Sr; the marriage was the culmination of a six-year long engagement between the two Congregationalists." This is an oddly-formatted sentence. Does the "two congregationalists" refer to other people or Warren and Otis? The sentence also implies the marriage was a result of their congregationalist beliefs, which I do not think you were intending.
 * The two Congregationalists are indeed Warren and Otis. I've removed the word "Congregationalists" altogether, as it was not really relevant. What do you think?
 * "The group agreed that a representative from each of the Thirteen Colonies should gather in New York City" I have a feeling "representatives" should be plural
 * Done
 * If the source (or others) specify this, what "prominent roles" did Warren have?
 * My source (Gerlach 2004) doesn't specify anything more detailed than that, unfortunately.
 * "In a letter Warren wrote to John Adams in 1775, he stated that" --> "In a letter Warren wrote to John Adams in 1775, he stated, [insert quote here]"
 * Done
 * "During his one-year tenure, Warren's popularity waned due to his stance on currency issues" What "currency issues" did Warren speak on that got him in hot water?
 * Again, unfortunately, my source (Gerlach 2004) doesn't specify anything more detailed than that.
 * "However, "unwilling to accept the command of an officer of a lesser rank", Warren officially resigned from the militia on August 1777, bringing an end to his military career." Any reason why that needed to be in quotes? Generally a good idea to use quotes as little as possible.
 * Removed

Pretty interesting read, if I say so myself. BTW, while looking for sources this article did not include, I found a lot of stuff, which was cited to biographies of Warren's wife Mercy and scholarship work about the American revolution. Although GA does not require completeness, I did notice that there was a lot more about Adams' and Warren's letters between each other, which I found underrepresented. Heck, there's an entire academic article about it. Otherwise, good work! 👨x🐱 ( Nina Cortex x Coco Bandicoot ) 18:56, 2 March 2022 (UTC)
 * Hi, thank you for the speedy review (and the kind comments). I will now go over the points you raised and address them as soon as possible. As for your comment that the article could include more information on the relationships between James Warren and his friends and family, I am currently saving that for when I eventually (time permitting, of course) take the article to FA status. Regards, Dabberoni15 (talk) 19:12, 2 March 2022 (UTC)
 * Passed 👨x🐱 ( Nina Cortex x Coco Bandicoot ) 13:35, 3 March 2022 (UTC)