Talk:James White (inventor)/GA1

GA Review
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Nominator: 02:01, 30 April 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Sohom Datta (talk · contribs) 14:52, 22 June 2024 (UTC)

This has been around in the backlog long enough, I'll take a stab at this. Sohom ( talk ) 14:52, 22 June 2024 (UTC)

Review

 * 600 subscribers -- I don't think subscribers is the right term here.
 * Source uses it but yeah it doesn't seem right. Used customers instead. -G
 * although it is unknown if White was aware of its separate invention by clockmakers, first attested by Joseph Williamson c. 1720. -- This is a bit hard to parse, what does first attested by mean in the context?
 * Good point, rephrased a bit. - G
 * bolstered by cross-Channel transmission -- cross-channel?
 * Capitalisation is correct when referring specifically to the English Channel. - G
 * possibly indicating his acquaintanceship -- Why possibly?
 * Source sorta hedges its bets without fully committing. I think this is because he never actually mentioned the Earl Stanhope until later in life. - G
 * possibly indicating that his parents were Nonconformists. -- Is this backed up by the source, feels like a bit of a stretch to assume this?
 * The source makes this claim directly; "No record [of his birth] is found in the Church Baptismal Record there. His parents may have been Nonconformists." - G
 * It would be usefull to put the things he invented into context with one line explaining what they were. While I do have a background in engineering (CS based tho lol) out-flow radial turbine and single and double helical gears are not things I can immediately conjur up mental pictures for and it takes me a while to parse/figure out what they are.
 * I admit I wasn't absolutely sure what some of these are; but I tried my best to elaborate lol. - G
 * Sources check out
 * Sorry it took a while! Does this look good? Generalissima (talk) (it/she) 04:01, 1 July 2024 (UTC)
 * Looks good to me, this is good to go! Sohom ( talk ) 14:21, 14 July 2024 (UTC)