Talk:James van Riemsdyk/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk · contribs) 04:13, 21 October 2021 (UTC)


 * I will review this later. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 04:13, 21 October 2021 (UTC)

Philadelphia Flyers

 * I think you can expand on his impact as a rookie beyond the team (see )
 * —  Ghost River  17:08, 29 October 2021 (UTC)
 * He was kind of in the race for the Calder, earning 3 votes.
 * —  Ghost River  17:08, 29 October 2021 (UTC)
 * LOL, imagine coming back from a 3–0 deficit. Couldn't be the Leafs.
 * This is Philly! We get it done, but we never make it easy! —  Ghost River  17:08, 29 October 2021 (UTC)
 * I imagine the "kid line" is because of their youth but I think it can be explained a bit. Maybe alongside young forwards Brayden Schenn and Jakub Voráček
 * —  Ghost River  17:08, 29 October 2021 (UTC)

Toronto Maple Leafs

 * I think you can expand a bit on the trade with Schenn. Per this, he was part of trade rumors during the offseason/throughout the year.
 * —  Ghost River  17:08, 29 October 2021 (UTC)
 * WL plus-minus
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  17:08, 29 October 2021 (UTC)
 * In the fourth paragraph, you WL Kadri and Komarov even though they were WL in the first paragraph
 * —  Ghost River  17:08, 29 October 2021 (UTC)

Second stint with Philadelphia

 * took a puck to the leg from the Colorado Avalanche, this seems awkwardly worded to me. It should say during a game against the Colorado Avalanche or even name the specific player.
 * —  Ghost River  17:08, 29 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Maybe WL to 2020_Stanley_Cup_playoffs to explain the "bubble."
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  17:08, 29 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Please WL List of 2020–21 NHL Three Star Awards for He was named the NHL East Division Star of the Month for January 2021.
 * ✅ —  Ghost River  17:08, 29 October 2021 (UTC)

Couple more things

 * The sentence about the "kid line" is kind of a run-on. As well, you should take out which because it doesn't make sense with the sentence.
 * How does it look now?
 * Can you please add a hyphen in hat trick to bypass the redirect?
 * For the Athletic sources that are hidden behind a paywall, please follow Template:Closed access
 * ✅ Used "url-access=subscription", as recommended by the template
 * Why do you need two  different sources (one in the body and one in the chart) for the Hockey East All-Rookie Team? Can you not use the same one?
 * Can you please change Calder Trophy to Calder Memorial Trophy to bypass the redirect?
 * Please WL the first mention of The Morning Call in work
 * , this should do it . HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 00:00, 30 October 2021 (UTC)
 * All done! Thanks for taking look at such a large article! —  Ghost River  00:11, 30 October 2021 (UTC)
 * , the longer it is, the more fun it is! I am passing this, well done. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 00:15, 30 October 2021 (UTC)
 * , this should do it . HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 00:00, 30 October 2021 (UTC)
 * All done! Thanks for taking look at such a large article! —  Ghost River  00:11, 30 October 2021 (UTC)
 * , the longer it is, the more fun it is! I am passing this, well done. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 00:15, 30 October 2021 (UTC)
 * , the longer it is, the more fun it is! I am passing this, well done. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 00:15, 30 October 2021 (UTC)