Talk:Jane Aitken/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 07:20, 13 September 2021 (UTC)

Comments
 * "with several Scottish families in 1771. " several compatriots in?


 * Link Philadelphia.


 * Link bookbinding.

sentence, like "and about 400 volumes..."
 * "She printed and bound about 400 volumes" repetitive, perhaps just follow on from the previous


 * "Christian Bible" is there another notable Bible other than the Christian one?


 * Death inline references not needed in the infobox, they can go in the prose.


 * Usually talk about her mother/father before her siblings.


 * Link bookbinder again in the main body.


 * "which she ran at North Third Street" what happened to the other place?


 * "which is 500 feet " was, and convert.


 * "Then in 1808 her " -> "The following year, ..."


 * "from notes he had signed for" from notes for which he had signed. And what are these "notes"?


 * "54,258" reduce that precision to nearest $1000.


 * "known as Miss Jane Aitken.[1]" no need for italics.


 * "than the actual printing" no need for "actual".


 * "shows similarity to her binding work from 1802 to 1812 and shows that perhaps" shows shows... and this feels speculative. Who is making this connection, it's not Wikipedia.


 * "She was advertising" She advertised.


 * " friend of hers" friend of Aitken


 * "equipment was sold off" no need for "off".


 * "20 miles " convert.


 * Works - convert this to a gallery like I did in one of your other articles and utilise the caption option instead of "Some of her other works were -"...


 * "of the Christian Bible" okay so maybe there are other notable Bibles! But you link that here, but not in the lead.


 * "most important book she produced during" which "she"?


 * "Other early businesswomen in contention" not sure this is really relevant to the article.


 * "1820-1900" endash.


 * That's all I have for today. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 11:43, 17 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Thanks for review. I'll get started on it.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 12:43, 17 September 2021 (UTC)
 * All issues have been addressed. Can you take another loook. Thanks.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:58, 17 September 2021 (UTC)