Talk:Janine Brookner/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Kavyansh.Singh (talk · contribs) 07:04, 7 January 2022 (UTC) Nominator: Sammielh (talk · contribs) at 21:46, 6 January 2022 (UTC)

Prose

 * she became the first person to sue to agency for sexual discrimination and win — "and win" seems odd. How about "and won"?
 * I have changed it to "she became the first person to successfully sue the agency for sexual discrimination". I have also added this into the body of the article and cited it, as I realised this was missing.
 * a job with the Central Intelligence Agency — "a job in the Central Intelligence Agency (CIA)"
 * Done
 * she was moved to Thailand — transferred?
 * Done
 * She moved back to — at the starting of every paragraph, you'll need to specify 'she' as 'Brookner'
 * Done
 * She faced several internal problems — same as above
 * Done
 * In May 1992, she was finally — same as above
 * Done
 * by Vice President Dan Quayle — pipe 'vice president' out of the link
 * Done
 * Ambassador Glen Holden — same as above
 * Done
 * Inspector General Frederick Hitz — avoid linking two adjacent words
 * I have reworded this section, please let me know what you think
 * on Lime Key — our article calls it Lime Cay
 * The source I used calls it Lime Key but I have changed it to align with the article
 * to dispute the charges but when the CIA failed to respond, — comma after 'charges'
 * Done
 * Drug Enforcement Administration’s — fix the quote (’ to ')
 * I thought I'd caught these all! Fixed it
 * to the United States Attorney General, — I think it should be clear from the context that the nation we are talking about is US. Suggestion to remove 'United States'
 * I included United States to specify that it was federal rather than state, but that might also be obvious from context so I have removed it
 * This became her specialty. — is it a better way to phrase it?
 * I have tried to make it flow better with the following sentence, please let me know what you think
 * The "Later life" section should be re-titled to "Death"
 * Done
 * "and was responsible for recruiting diplomats from the Soviet Union to spy for the United States" —— thats like the most difficult job ever!!

Images

 * Any chance we can get Brookner's freely licenced image? This image is published in The New York Times, credited to Benjamin C. Tankersley/for The Washington Post. Would it be worth contacting the photographer, requesting him to release the image under CC-BY-SA-4.0 via Commons:Commons:Volunteer Response Team. Now, I don't think they'll do that, but its worth trying. Anyways, that is not strictly part of the GA criteria.
 * I agree that it's unlikely but I can give it a shot. I considered trying to add an image under fair use because I can't find a publicly available image anywhere but, as a lawyer, it makes me a bit nervous
 * As the subject has recently died, I am also unsure for a non-free image. Better try asking Mr. Tankersley, if you are comfortable doing so, but I won't make this point a big deal for this GAN. – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 04:49, 8 January 2022 (UTC)