Talk:Japanese aircraft carrier Ryūjō/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Anotherclown (talk · contribs) 00:38, 15 September 2013 (UTC)

Progression

 * Version of the article when originally reviewed:
 * Version of the article when review was closed:

Technical review

 * Citations: The Citation Check tool reveals no errors with reference consolidation (no action req'd).
 * Disambiguations: no dab links (no action req'd).
 * Linkrot: external links check out (no action req'd).
 * Alt text: Images all lack alt text so you might consider adding it (not a GA req'ment - suggestion only).
 * Copyright violations: The Earwig Tool reveals no issues with copyright violations or close paraphrasing (no action req'd).
 * Duplicate links: a few duplicate links:
 * funnels
 * bridge
 * flight deck
 * typhoon
 * Nakajima B5N
 * Kakuji Kakuta
 * heavy cruiser

Criteria

 * It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS):
 * In the lead this is a little repetitive: "She proved to be top-heavy and only marginally stable and she was back in the shipyard for modifications to address those issues within a year." Specifically "she" twice in same sentence. Perhaps consider more simply: "She proved to be top-heavy and only marginally stable and was back in the shipyard for modifications to address those issues within a year."
 * Suggested rewording her: "...the Navy doubled her aircraft stowage requirement to 48 in order to give her a more useful air group...", consider instead "... the Navy doubled her aircraft stowage requirement to 48 in order to give her a more capable air group..."
 * Measurement should be hypothecated here as its an adjective per WP:MEASUREMENT, "...Her 513 ft 6 in (156.5 m) flight deck..."
 * "As completed, Ryūjō's primary AA armament...", what is AA? Abbrev needs to be introduced at first use (you link and explain the abbrev a few sentences later).
 * Adjective here too unless I'm mistaken: "...25 millimeters (0.98 in) AA guns."
 * Date format here seems off: " the ship was reconstructed from 26 May 1934 to 20 August...", consider instead: " the ship was reconstructed from 26 May to 20 August 1934..."
 * Typo here: "Captain Ichiro Ono assumed command on 15 November 1934 and Ryūjō becomes the flagship...", consider instead: "Captain Ichiro Ono assumed command on 15 November 1934 and Ryūjō became the flagship..."
 * Typo here: "The following month the ship was chosen to evaluate of dive-bombing tactics...:, consider instead: "...The following month the ship was chosen to evaluate dive-bombing tactics..."
 * This seems awkward to me: "Her aircraft complement consisted of 12 (plus four spares) A4N fighters...", consider instead: "Her aircraft complement consisted of 12 A4N fighters (plus four spares)..."
 * "Her air group is flown ashore on 6 October..." → "Her air group was flown ashore on 6 October..."
 * "Ryūjō is given a refit that lasts from December 1939 through January 1940 and becomes a training ship until November..." → "Ryūjō was given a refit that lasts from December 1939 through January 1940 and becomes a training ship until November..."
 * "The ship's air group now consists of 18 Nakajima B5N ("Kate") torpedo bombers and 16 A5M4 fighters..." → "The ship's air group then consisted of 18 Nakajima B5N ("Kate") torpedo bombers and 16 A5M4 fighters."


 * It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * All major points cited using WP:RS.
 * No issues with OR.


 * It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * Most major points seem to be covered without going into undue detail.
 * Level of coverage seems appropriate.


 * It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * a (fair representation): b (all significant views):
 * No issues here.


 * It is stable.
 * No edit wars etc.:
 * No issues here.


 * It contains images, where possible, to illustrate the topic.
 * a (tagged and captioned): b (Is illustrated with appropriate images):  c (non-free images have fair use rationales):  d public domain pictures appropriately demonstrate why they are public domain:
 * Images are all PD and seem appropriate to the article.


 * Overall:
 * a Pass/Fail:
 * Looks fine, just a few minor prose and MOS issues above to deal with. Happy to discuss anything you disagree with of course. Anotherclown (talk) 01:36, 15 September 2013 (UTC)

I've fixed everything that you've point about above. A most thorough review. Many thanks.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 03:37, 15 September 2013 (UTC)
 * Too easy. Passing now. All the best. Anotherclown (talk) 05:11, 15 September 2013 (UTC)