Talk:Jared Norris/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 07:43, 21 November 2017 (UTC)

Going to review this. Promise that this will be the last of your articles to be reviewed by me for a while! MWright96 (talk) 07:43, 21 November 2017 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

Lead

 * "He played in 42 games, starting 32, during his college career, " - reword to During his college career, Wiliams played in 42 games and started 32 of them. ✅
 * "recorded 269 total tackles, 7.0 sacks, eight pass breakups, four forced fumbles and two fumble recoveries." - wikilink or explain the jargon that is in this piece of text. Also this should start with HE recorded 269 total tackles, ✅

Early years

 * Valley fever, inside linebacker and middleline backer are redirect links that need attention to. ✅
 * "His junior year," - In his junior year, ✅
 * "He garnered Second Team MaxPreps Division I All-State" - Norris earned ✅
 * Spell out MVP and wikilink it ✅
 * "He won the Hometown All-Stars Linebacker Award for the second year in a row." - better Norris won the Hometown All-Stars Linebacker Award for the second consecutive year. ✅
 * "Norris committed to Utah in May 2010." - write out a little more so it reads as follows Norris committed to playing college football for Utah in May 2010. ✅

College career

 * The following are redirect links: mac linebacker, rover linebacker, Pac-12, the Bednarik Award and the Lott IMPACT Trophy. ✅
 * Added a wikilink to the first mention of fumble and bachelor's degree ✅
 * "He played in ten games, starting seven, in 2013." - He played in ten games, and started seven of them in 2013. ✅
 * "He missed two games due to injury." - is there anything to explain what type of injury Norris sustained?
 * All I found was "The Utes were without corner Davion Orphey and linebacker Jared Norris, who remained in Salt Lake City due to injuries. Norris also sat out the Oregon game." WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 03:58, 23 November 2017 (UTC)


 * "In July 2015," - change to Three months later ✅
 * "He played in 42 games, starting 32, during his college career." - Throughout his colleg career, Norris played in 42 games and started 32 of them. ✅

Professional career

 * "recording 3 solo tackles and 3 tackle assists" - spell out three per MOS:NUMERAL ✅

Personal life

 * Please don't use Norris' first name. ✅

That is all the issues I could find during my reading of this article. On hold. MWright96 (talk) 09:14, 21 November 2017 (UTC)
 * Thanks for addressing the issues I've raised. I'll accept the view you cannot a source that states the specific type of injury Norris sustained. This article can now be given the GA symbol. MWright96 (talk) 06:56, 23 November 2017 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 06:59, 23 November 2017 (UTC)