Talk:Jason Moore (Wikipedia editor)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Vortex3427 (talk · contribs) 23:57, 28 October 2022 (UTC)

Hi, I'm planning to review this article. This is my first GA review, so please notify me if you have any concerns. — V ORTEX  3427 (Talk!) 23:57, 28 October 2022 (UTC) That's all from me. Ping me when you've addressed all of these.
 * As a prolific volunteer, he personally documented the pandemic's burgeoning reach across multiple U.S. states, business sectors, and communities. How about something like He documented its...? You've already established that he is a prolific editor, and I don't see what "personally" adds in this context.
 * Edited
 * He has described being motivated by said he is motivated by
 * Source go out of date over time, so this language hedges rather than assuming he still is motivated by these things czar  01:49, 29 October 2022 (UTC)
 * on the developing event in real-time Maybe drop developing or on the event as it developed?
 * I think "real-time" is useful context for a general reader czar  01:49, 29 October 2022 (UTC)
 * resulting series of protests series of protests following the murder of George Floyd?
 * Maybe link outreach in the final sentence in 'Wikipedia'?
 * It's a dictionary word and not quite the same as the contents of outreach so I'd prefer not
 * What makes Portland Mercury reliable?
 * It's a prominent alt weekly with a dedicated staff and sizable print circulation, and it's only used for local, unexceptional claims. czar  00:41, 29 October 2022 (UTC)
 * You could wikilink Ref 15 to Wikipedia @ 20.
 * Done
 * I spotchecked Refs 1, 3 and 4. I noticed that Ref 4 says he currently works at Oregon Symphony while Personal life mentions he previously worked there.
 * Yes, based on later refs it's assumed that he changed jobs czar  01:49, 29 October 2022 (UTC)
 * All images properly tagged.
 * Could you elaborate on unfamiliar term digital strategist in personal life, or adapt the phrasing from the sources?
 * Both sources are similarly vague on the contents of the job and we don't have an article on digital consulting; it's a fairly common job title so I don't think it will cause issues czar  01:49, 29 October 2022 (UTC)
 * Thanks, ! Commented above and appreciate the review. czar  01:49, 29 October 2022 (UTC)


 * Now passing this. — V ORTEX  3427 (Talk!) 04:48, 29 October 2022 (UTC)