Talk:Java campaign of 1806–1807/GA1

GA Review
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 * GA review (see here for criteria)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS):
 * 'British Royal Navy forces against the forces of the Kingdom of Holland,' - Repetition of 'forces'
 * Repetition of 'was able' in the second paragraph of the lede
 * 'At the start of 1806, control in the Indian Ocean in the Napoleonic Wars was disputed' - 'of the Indian Ocean' would seem better.
 * 'but were still insufficient' - 'but their forces were still insufficient' needs to be added, I think, as we're referring to the British being unable to effect complete control of the ocean. Either that or replace 'insufficient' with 'unable'. Either/or, really.
 * Repetition of 'too concerned' in Background section
 * 'Batavia roads' - What context is 'roads' used here? It doesn't seem to have been used previously.
 * 'Captain Pellew opened fire on the other grounded ships while boats boarded them in turn' - Should probably be clarified, as I doubt he fired when the boats were actually boarding the vessels!
 * Couple of instances in the Griesse section where you use variations on 'without a single casualty', and it seems a little peacockish; I'd suggest getting rid of 'single' to make it more neutral.
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 'Cautious of the larger force' - Should probably mention he believed one ship to be a ship of the line.
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

That's about it. Good article, needs a few details checked before I can pass it. Cheers, Skinny87 (talk) 15:47, 10 October 2009 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review. I think I have addressed all of the above, let me know if there are any more problems.--Jackyd101 (talk) 11:45, 11 October 2009 (UTC)
 * Thankyou very much!--Jackyd101 (talk) 18:21, 11 October 2009 (UTC)