Talk:Jawdhar/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Iazyges (talk · contribs) 17:39, 20 September 2022 (UTC)

Criteria
GA Criteria:
 * 1
 * 1.a   ✅
 * 1.b   ✅
 * 2
 * 2.a   ✅
 * 2.b   ✅
 * 2.c   ✅
 * 2.d   ✅
 * 3
 * 3.a   ✅
 * 3.b   ✅
 * 4
 * 4.a   ✅
 * 5
 * 5.a   ✅
 * 6
 * 6.a   ✅
 * 6.b   ✅
 * No DAB links   ✅
 * No dead links   ✅
 * No missing citations   ✅ (I don't suppose the third book in memoirs technically needs a citation, but as the other two are cited you may wish to add one for uniformity).

Discussion

 * Spotchecks performed on bits from Brett and Haji (the only two I have access to). Iazyges   Consermonor   Opus meum  17:46, 20 September 2022 (UTC)

Prose Suggestions
Please note that almost all of these are suggestions, and can be implemented or ignored at your discretion. Any changes I deem necessary for the article to pass GA standards I will bold.

Origin and early career

 * (No suggestion) Jawdhar was a eunuch slave of Slavic origin (Saqaliba): Fascinating how the motivation for having such slaves is basically identical to the Varangian Guard of their perennial allies.

Under al-Mansur

 * Jawdhar insists in his memoirs that he was the trustee of al-Mansur's secret nomination as his father's heir already at the time of al-Qa'im's own accession in 934, the matter of succession was, theoretically, up entirely to al-Qa'im, and not elected/consulted by others, correct? If so, suggest perhaps changing secret nomination to undisclosed selection, if not, suggest a brief explanation of who else was involved.
 * that is all my suggestions, a very nice article and interesting read. Iazyges   Consermonor   Opus meum  18:13, 20 September 2022 (UTC)