Talk:Jaws Wired Shut/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer:  R uby2010   comment!  15:48, 1 June 2011 (UTC)

I will review soon.  R uby2010  comment!  15:48, 1 June 2011 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:

Comments

 * Fox Broadcasting Company -> Fox network
 * The brief plot summary in the lead has awkward phrasing. I might recommend a rewrite. Also, wikilink Drederick Tatum and setpiece
 * In lead, make more clear John Kassir is a guest star. Also, add ratings summary to lead
 * Wikilink Bart in plot section
 * "dangerous for her and needs help." -> danger for her, causing her to need help (or something similar)
 * Indicate Matt Selman is executive producer
 * Wikilink setpiece in production section
 * don't capitalize "How much crap..."
 * "However, he did say that one should eat a lot before since one will lose weight when one's jaw is wired shut." That's alot of "one"s. Maybe change last "one" to "their" (as in "when their jaw is wired shut")?
 * Make sure ALL sentences with direct quotes have citations directly at end of sentence
 * Kassir plays multiple dogs?
 * "similar to Popeye after drinking he beer" typo
 * Wikilink Olive Oyl
 * "On August 24, 2010, "Jaws Wired Shut" was released as part of The Simpsons: The Complete Thirteenth Season DVD and Blu-ray set. Matt Groening, Al Jean, Matt Selman, Carolyn Omine, Dana Gould, Joe Mantegna and Pete Michels participated in the audio commentary of the episode." Needs ref (just use audio commentary refs)
 * DVD Verdict is not italicized

The article was interesting to read and only needs small fixes, as listed above. I'll place the review on hold for seven days while everything gets sorted. Thanks,  R uby2010   comment!  17:04, 1 June 2011 (UTC)
 * Thanks, and thanks for the review! I think I've fixed all the problems now. Queenieacoustic (talk) 20:14, 1 June 2011 (UTC)
 * Looks good. Pass for GA. Nice work! BTW, I just discovered that DVD Verdict is an article, so feel free to start wikilinking it in the future. Thanks,  R uby2010   comment!  20:59, 1 June 2011 (UTC)
 * I didn't know that, thanks! :D Queenieacoustic (talk) 21:04, 1 June 2011 (UTC)