Talk:Jay Dunlap

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Very nice start on your draft. You could use some more inline sources. Everything in the article should be supported by an inline reference. The reference needs to be placed after the statement it supports, and needs to be in the same paragraph as the statement. One reference at the end of a paragraph is OK if it supports everything in the paragraph, but you can't have content after the final reference, because there's no way for readers to know which source it's supported by.

Your lead section should summarize all the major points of the article, in proportion to how they're covered in the article. It doesn't really do that right now. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 14:10, 19 April 2019 (UTC)