Talk:Jazz Richards/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Sportsfan77777 (talk · contribs) 16:31, 27 October 2018 (UTC)

I'll review this one before the end of the month. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 16:31, 27 October 2018 (UTC)

Lead

 * A versatile player, who <<<=== get rid of that comma - Done
 * , making 51 appearances for the club in all competitions during a six-year spell with the first-team. ===> He made only 51 appearances for the club in all competitions during a six-year spell with the first team. (new sentence; 51 is not a lot in six years; there shouldn't be a hyphen in first team) - Done
 * their local rivals Cardiff City <<<=== Isn't Cardiff their Welsh rivals, not their local rivals? As in, they are in different cities? (I assume you would know better than me, haha)
 * Technically both but the rivalry is primarily local, even though they are different cities, they are closer to each other than any other team historically.


 * Add that he first established himself as a regular with Fulham in 2015. - Done


 * To ensure that the last sentence of the lead is correct, I have added in the international stats section below the career stats so that this part is verifiable and correct to date. Iggy (Swan) 08:57, 28 October 2018 (UTC)

Swansea start

 * Richards was a product of local schools football <<<=== What does local schools football mean? Is that a recognized term? - Done
 * Richards initially started out as a midfielder but converted to playing as a defender, a position he continues to play today, under manager Roberto Martínez, due to the increased competitiveness of midfielders in the first team at the time,[4] earning £60 a week while on a scholarship with the Swans.[5] ===>>> Richards initially started out as a midfielder but switched to playing as a defender under manager Roberto Martínez due to the increased competition between midfielders in the first team at the time. He has since continued to play at that position as well.[4] Richards earned £60 a week while on a scholarship with the Swans.[5] - Done
 * At the end of the 2009–10 season, during which Richards made 15 appearances, he signed a new two-year deal with Swansea. ===>> After Richards made 15 appearances during the 2009–10 season, he signed a new two-year deal with Swansea. - Done
 * The start of the 2010–11 season saw Richards spend the opening six months as an unused substitute or in the reserve side, not making his first appearance of the season until 3 January 2011, during a 2–1 defeat against Leicester City, [9] following a defensive injury crisis where several first team players were ruled out.[10] ===>>> The start of the 2010–11 season saw Richards spend the opening six months as an unused substitute or in the reserve side. He did not make his first appearance of the season until 3 January 2011, during a 2–1 defeat against Leicester City,[9] following a defensive injury crisis where several first team players were ruled out.[10] - Done
 * Throughout January and February, Richards was given a handful of first team opportunities until he lost his first team place for the remainder of the season following the return of Àngel Rangel from injury. ===>>> Throughout January and February, Richards was given a handful of first team opportunities. However, he lost his first team place for the remainder of the season following the return of Àngel Rangel from injury. - Done
 * After appearing on the substitute bench for several matches - Done
 * Twelve days later, he was rewarded with a new 18-month contract,[15] before making his first start for the club in the Premier League, playing in a 4–2 loss against Blackburn Rovers on 3 December 2011. ===>>> Twelve days later, he was rewarded with a new 18-month contract.[15] He then made his first start for the club in the Premier League, playing in a 4–2 loss against Blackburn Rovers on 3 December 2011. - Done
 * Despite this, Richards finished the 2011–12 season, making 8 appearances. ====>>>> He finished the season with 8 appearances. - Done

Loan to Crystal Palace

 * However, he was forced to wait until 25 January 2013 to secure a move, making four appearances in cup competitions for Swansea, joining Crystal Palace on loan until the end of the season. ===>>> However, he was forced to wait until the winter transfer window to secure a move. In the first half of the season, he made just four appearances for Swansea, all in cup competitions. At the end of January, he joined Crystal Palace on loan until the end of the season. - Done
 * In his next match, on 2 February 2013, Richards provided an assist for Glenn Murray to score a winning goal, as they beat South London rivals, Charlton Athletic 2–1. ===>>> In his next match against Charlton Athletic, Richards assisted Glenn Murray's winning goal as Palace defeated their South London rivals 2–1. - Done

Loan to Huddersfield

 * in a 0–0 draw against Malmö, helping Swansea advance after winning 4–0 on aggregate ===>>> a 0–0 draw against Malmö, helping Swansea advance 4–0 on aggregate. - Done
 * On 10 September 2013, Richards joined Championship side Huddersfield Town on a 93-day emergency loan. <<<<==== What does emergency loan mean? (I assume it was after the transfer window closed?) If it means anything else, the link does not use that term. - Swapped ref
 * His loan spell ended on 17 December, after 9 appearances for the Terriers. ===>>> His loan spell ended on 17 December after just 9 appearances with the Terriers. - Done
 * Following his return from his loan spell, Richards didn't make his an appearance until 16 February 2014 when he made played in a 3–1 loss against Everton in the last-16 of the FA Cup. ===>>> Following his return from his loan spell, Richards did not appear in another match until 16 February 2014 when he played in a 3–1 loss against Everton in the last sixteen of the FA Cup. - Done

Return to Swansea

 * He (add "then") made his first Premier League appearance in two years, when he came on as a substitute in the 82nd minute of a 0–0 draw against Sunderland on 27 September 2014. <<<=== get rid of the comma - Done
 * In a 2–1 loss against Tottenham Hotspur on 14 December 2014, Richards was at fault when he made an error, leading to Christian Eriksen scoring the winning goal. ====>>> In a 2–1 loss against Tottenham Hotspur on 14 December 2014, Richards made an error that led to Christian Eriksen scoring the winning goal. - Done
 * How did that incident affect his playing time? - Expanded slightly
 * Add a short closing paragraph. Something along the lines of: "This turned out to be Richards' last season with Swansea. In six years with the club, he made just 51 appearances for the club and never established himself as a regular. Eighteen of his appearances came in the Premier League. His lone match in the 2013–14 Europa League qualifiers was his only appearance in European competition." - Added with a few tweaks

Fulham

 * Having made five appearances ===>>> After making five appearances - Done
 * Richards went on to make 14 appearances for the Cottagers, (add "all of which were starts"). - Done
 * Fulham had a bid accepted to sign Richards on a permanent deal,[39] with the transfer being confirmed on 2 July 2015. Richards signed a three-year deal with the option of a fourth, for an undisclosed fee.[40] ===>>> On 2 July 2015, Swansea accepted Fulham's bid for Richards to transfer on a permanent deal.[39] He signed a three-year deal with the option of a fourth, for an undisclosed fee.[40] (Also, combine this with the next paragraph) - Done
 * Richards' first match after signing for the club on a permanent basis came in the opening match of the season, in a 1–1 draw against Cardiff City. <<<=== Get rid of this sentence. - Done
 * However, his season was soon marked with injuries.[42][43] Despite this, Richards' finished his first full season at Fulham, making 22 appearances. <<<=== Although his year was marked with injuries,[42][43] Richards made 22 appearances with the club in his only season as a permanent member of the club. He established himself as a regular when he was healthy. - Done

Cardiff

 * A new sentence should be added after the first that says he continued to play as a regular in the starting lineup. - Done
 * He made his debut in a goalless draw at Birmingham City, where he became embroiled in controversy after reportedly refusing to do Cardiff's traditional ayatollah gesture several times at the match. <<<=== Briefly describe what this gesture is (as in, what is the purpose of it?) - Done
 * At the end of the second paragraph, add that he finished the season with a career-best 26 appearances. - Done
 * being forces to undergo ankle surgery after sustaining an injury during 2–1 victory over Sunderland on 23 September 2017 ===>>> being forced to undergo surgery after hurting his ankle during a 2–1 victory over Sunderland on 23 September 2017. - Done
 * He returned from injury in January 2018, playing in five matches before his season was ended by a further injury. <<<=== What was the second injury? Also, that second injury is not cited. - Done
 * He made (add "only") eleven appearances - Done

International

 * Richards represented Wales under-17 and Wales under-19. (Abbreviate the second time.) - Done
 * Mention that he had at least 10 appearances with each of the U17, U19, and U21 teams. - Done
 * He played his only game in the tournament in the opening game, a 2–1 victory over Slovakia,[55] as Wales reached the semi-finals before losing to Portugal. ===>>> He played his only game in the tournament as a late substitute in the team's first match, a 2–1 victory over Slovakia.[55] Wales went on to reach the semi-finals before losing to Portugal. ("game" was a repeat word; add substitute mention; two sentences) - Done
 * Add: "As of October 2018, Richards has had 14 international caps with Wales, including seven appearances in the starting lineup. He played in four matches in Euro 2016 qualifying and three in 2018 World Cup qualifying." - Done

Career statistics

 * Good.

Personal life

 * Richards' comes from a family with a sporting background, his cousin, Eli Walker, is a rugby union player, and Tobias Webb, another cousin, is a super-middleweight champion boxer.[58] ===>>> Richards comes from a family with a sporting background, as his cousins Eli Walker and Tobias Webb are also professional athletes. Walker is a rugby union player, while Webb is a super-middleweight champion boxer.[58] (split into multiple sentences.) - Done

Overall

 * Dead links
 * Fixtures/results: Middlesbrough 3–0 Swansea http://www.soccerbase.com/results3.sd?meid=588929 - Removed
 * UEFA Euro 2016 – Wales 2–1 Slovakia http://www.uefa.com/uefaeuro/season=2016/matches/round=2000448/match=2017880/lineups/index.html - Replaced
 * No plagiarism detected.
 * Images are freely available.
 * No bare refs.
 * No dab links.

Overall, most of these changes are related to grammar. Run-on sentences are a recurring problem. There are some suggestions related to content as well, the most important of which relate to Richards becoming a regular player more recently (and not being a regular while at Swansea). His team at Swansea and his time on the Welsh national team could use better summaries, as suggested above. Placing on hold. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 00:01, 28 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review, I've amended all of the issues raised above. Let me know what you think. Kosack (talk) 15:53, 28 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Passed, after some further copyediting. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 00:11, 29 October 2018 (UTC)