Talk:Jean-Luc Moulène

incomprehensible
I have tagged the article as "incomprehensible" because of the lead, which cites (or quotes, that isn't exactly clear, opus + one. It may well be so that this has been said about Moulène's work, but we are an encyclopedia. Our goal is not to intimidate our readers with impenetrable post-modernist jargon, but to elucidate. The lead fails in that respect. Please rewrite it in plain English. Vexations (talk) 16:40, 17 June 2020 (UTC)
 * To clarify: The phrase "Bound within conceptual parameters" seems to come from
 * https://miguelabreugallery.com/wp-content/uploads/2014/07/JLMoulene_SelectedPress_opt.pdf, where it makes more sense because those "parameters" (perhaps better described as "conditions for its operation" are enumerated:
 * it must be separate and complete in itself
 * make clear the conditions under which it was produced
 * establish a direct link with that from which it has been separated
 * But without knowing this, that second sentence in the lead makes no sense. Vexations (talk) Vexations (talk) 17:44, 17 June 2020 (UTC)

Thanks for the feedback. Monak210 (talk) Monak210 (talk)

Moulène's practice examines the relationship between systems and orders.
"Moulène's practice examines the relationship between systems and orders." Please explain what that means. Vexations (talk) 20:46, 18 June 2020 (UTC)