Talk:Jean McGuire

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Iferrrerb (talk) 00:55, 14 March 2015 (UTC)

Improving lead
I'm glad you took this subject on! Notice that you've gotten a challenge on notability. I think you have some information on her notability in the article itself (she was the first African-American woman on the Boston School Committee, right after Boston busing desegregation), so it would be helpful to show that in the lead section. I think rather than list her accomplishments, which you've done well, you could concentrate more on summary and writing in an encyclopedic style. Let me know if you need help! AmandaRR123 (talk) 22:16, 14 March 2015 (UTC)

This article is really well done with great information. I edited some of the sentences for structure but beyond that this is a great start. Tschn012 (talk) 18:23, 21 March 2015 (UTC)