Talk:Jellyfish/GA2

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Reviewer: Dunkleosteus77 (talk · contribs) 20:02, 2 October 2018 (UTC)

Comments by Dunkleosteus77

 * Just glossing over, you should probably talk about jellyfish and dead zones, and jelly falls  User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 20:02, 2 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Added sections on both of these. Chiswick Chap (talk) 15:07, 3 October 2018 (UTC)


 * in the lead, clearly say that the Medusa stage is when they’re free swimming animals  User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 00:20, 3 October 2018 (UTC)
 * It's mentioned in the second sentence. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 10:50, 3 October 2018 (UTC)


 * in refs, you’re inconsistent with using or omitting the month of publication  User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 00:20, 3 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Done all the ones I noticed. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:29, 3 October 2018 (UTC)


 * I don’t think you need “sometimes called jellyfish” in a subsection title  User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 00:20, 3 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Removed. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 10:50, 3 October 2018 (UTC)


 * Who is Paulyn Cartwright and you need to wikilink basically everything said in the following quote  User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 00:20, 3 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 10:50, 3 October 2018 (UTC)


 * What’s a coelenterate?  User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 00:20, 3 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 10:50, 3 October 2018 (UTC)


 * What’s a velum?  User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 00:20, 3 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:29, 3 October 2018 (UTC)


 * What’s a manubrium?  User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 00:20, 3 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:29, 3 October 2018 (UTC)


 * What’s a mesoglea?  User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 00:20, 3 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:29, 3 October 2018 (UTC)


 * substrate is an overly complex word, just use “the ground” or “a surface”  User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 00:20, 3 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 10:50, 3 October 2018 (UTC)


 * You should probably stick with the common names “stalked jellyfish” and “true jellyfish.” People’s brains are just gonna skip over “Staurozoa” and “Scyphozoa” and they look too similar so they’ll just be confused  User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 00:20, 3 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Done where appropriate. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 10:50, 3 October 2018 (UTC)

Thank you for taking on this review. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:29, 3 October 2018 (UTC)

More comments

 * I made more comments but they didn’t save so I’ll come back tomorrow with the same comments  User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 02:05, 4 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Or 3 days later  User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 17:28, 7 October 2018 (UTC)


 * "...is contained by..." maybe use, "bordered by," or something similar  User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 17:28, 7 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Fixed. I always hope to slip in an 'is comprised of' to trigger a bit of AWB in such instances ;-} Chiswick Chap (talk) 18:20, 7 October 2018 (UTC)


 * "In the niches between the lappets," what does "niche" mean in this instance?  User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 17:28, 7 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Glossed. Chiswick Chap (talk) 07:43, 8 October 2018 (UTC)


 * ref no. 29 isn't formatted correctly  User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 17:28, 7 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Done. Chiswick Chap (talk) 18:19, 7 October 2018 (UTC)


 * wikilink septa
 * Done. Chiswick Chap (talk) 18:06, 7 October 2018 (UTC)


 * You define the rhopalia in one place and then describe it way later <span style="font-family:Monotype Corsiva;background:#E6E6FA;border:solid 1px;border-radius:7px;box-shadow:darkblue 0px 3px 3px;"> User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 17:28, 7 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 09:39, 8 October 2018 (UTC)


 * You might wanna talk about general anatomy first and then the specifics of each class <span style="font-family:Monotype Corsiva;background:#E6E6FA;border:solid 1px;border-radius:7px;box-shadow:darkblue 0px 3px 3px;"> User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 17:28, 7 October 2018 (UTC)
 * I tried moving the Anatomy section to before the Taxonomy section and that had its disadvantages too. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 09:39, 8 October 2018 (UTC)
 * No I mean move the last 2 paragraphs in Anatomy to the top <span style="font-family:Monotype Corsiva;background:#E6E6FA;border:solid 1px;border-radius:7px;box-shadow:darkblue 0px 3px 3px;"> User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 18:53, 8 October 2018 (UTC)


 * ref no. 35 needs a tag <span style="font-family:Monotype Corsiva;background:#E6E6FA;border:solid 1px;border-radius:7px;box-shadow:darkblue 0px 3px 3px;">  User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 17:28, 7 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Added. Chiswick Chap (talk) 18:16, 7 October 2018 (UTC)


 * In the Diversity section, use undefined undefined <span style="font-family:Monotype Corsiva;background:#E6E6FA;border:solid 1px;border-radius:7px;box-shadow:darkblue 0px 3px 3px;"> User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 17:28, 7 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Done. Chiswick Chap (talk) 18:01, 7 October 2018 (UTC)


 * I don't understand the Diversity section's purpose. Is it about size because it goes off topic with fission and lifespan and so forth? <span style="font-family:Monotype Corsiva;background:#E6E6FA;border:solid 1px;border-radius:7px;box-shadow:darkblue 0px 3px 3px;"> User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 17:28, 7 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Called it 'Largest and smallest' which seems to describe its function and content well. Within that scope it seems well focussed, i.e. some forms are small but only short-lived, etc. Chiswick Chap (talk) 18:28, 7 October 2018 (UTC)


 * Since you measure the lion's mane jellyfish in meters you should probably give Nomura's jellyfish in meters too <span style="font-family:Monotype Corsiva;background:#E6E6FA;border:solid 1px;border-radius:7px;box-shadow:darkblue 0px 3px 3px;"> User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 17:28, 7 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Done. Chiswick Chap (talk) 07:39, 8 October 2018 (UTC)


 * "...is nearly always much greater than the up-to-100 centimetres (39 in) bell diameter Lion's Mane" <span style="font-family:Monotype Corsiva;background:#E6E6FA;border:solid 1px;border-radius:7px;box-shadow:darkblue 0px 3px 3px;"> User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 17:28, 7 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Up with which we will not put! Chiswick Chap (talk) 07:41, 8 October 2018 (UTC)


 * ref no. 47 is a deadlink <span style="font-family:Monotype Corsiva;background:#E6E6FA;border:solid 1px;border-radius:7px;box-shadow:darkblue 0px 3px 3px;"> User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 17:28, 7 October 2018 (UTC)
 * It's archived inside the ref. Chiswick Chap (talk) 18:08, 7 October 2018 (UTC)


 * On the third mention of planula, you italicized and wikilinked it, and you also wikilinked Scyphozoa in the Life cycle section <span style="font-family:Monotype Corsiva;background:#E6E6FA;border:solid 1px;border-radius:7px;box-shadow:darkblue 0px 3px 3px;"> User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 17:28, 7 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Fixed. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 09:39, 8 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Also, use true jellyfish <span style="font-family:Monotype Corsiva;background:#E6E6FA;border:solid 1px;border-radius:7px;box-shadow:darkblue 0px 3px 3px;"> User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 18:53, 8 October 2018 (UTC)
 * The term is already mentioned as a gloss for Scyphozoa in the tree and in the taxonomy section, which should be sufficient.


 * what are transverse constrictions? <span style="font-family:Monotype Corsiva;background:#E6E6FA;border:solid 1px;border-radius:7px;box-shadow:darkblue 0px 3px 3px;"> User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 17:28, 7 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Glossed. Chiswick Chap (talk) 07:38, 8 October 2018 (UTC)


 * You wikilink fission on second mention
 * WL first instance. Chiswick Chap (talk) 17:57, 7 October 2018 (UTC)


 * You're not very consistent with italicizing vocabulary words <span style="font-family:Monotype Corsiva;background:#E6E6FA;border:solid 1px;border-radius:7px;box-shadow:darkblue 0px 3px 3px;"> User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 17:28, 7 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Fixed, I think. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 09:39, 8 October 2018 (UTC)


 * ref no. 50 isn't formatted right <span style="font-family:Monotype Corsiva;background:#E6E6FA;border:solid 1px;border-radius:7px;box-shadow:darkblue 0px 3px 3px;"> User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 17:28, 7 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Fixed. Chiswick Chap (talk) 18:12, 7 October 2018 (UTC)


 * The Lifespan section seems to imply no one's seen a polyp <span style="font-family:Monotype Corsiva;background:#E6E6FA;border:solid 1px;border-radius:7px;box-shadow:darkblue 0px 3px 3px;"> User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 17:28, 7 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Fixed. Chiswick Chap (talk) 18:25, 7 October 2018 (UTC)


 * Why is " 'several year' " in quotes? <span style="font-family:Monotype Corsiva;background:#E6E6FA;border:solid 1px;border-radius:7px;box-shadow:darkblue 0px 3px 3px;"> User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 17:28, 7 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Gone. Chiswick Chap (talk) 17:58, 7 October 2018 (UTC)


 * That’s a pretty crude diagram you got going on there in the Locomotion section <span style="font-family:Monotype Corsiva;background:#E6E6FA;border:solid 1px;border-radius:7px;box-shadow:darkblue 0px 3px 3px;"> User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 18:53, 8 October 2018 (UTC)
 * It's accurate, explains something very surprising, and shows what needs to be shown. Not sure what else a science diagram should be, really. We can say "vertical section through the bell" or "sagittal section" if that would help. Chiswick Chap (talk) 19:08, 8 October 2018 (UTC)
 * No I mean aesthetically, but it’s not a problem for GA <span style="font-family:Monotype Corsiva;background:#E6E6FA;border:solid 1px;border-radius:7px;box-shadow:darkblue 0px 3px 3px;"> User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 21:41, 8 October 2018 (UTC)
 * I've tarted it up a little.

Even more comments

 * Isn’t there a species of herbivorous jellyfish in some lake? <span style="font-family:Monotype Corsiva;background:#E6E6FA;border:solid 1px;border-radius:7px;box-shadow:darkblue 0px 3px 3px;"> User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 18:53, 8 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Not sure what that might be referring to. We've mentioned Craspedacusta sowerbii which turned up in a canal in England (from China) recently. Chiswick Chap (talk) 19:08, 8 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Looking it up, I was thinking of Jellyfish Lake <span style="font-family:Monotype Corsiva;background:#E6E6FA;border:solid 1px;border-radius:7px;box-shadow:darkblue 0px 3px 3px;"> User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 21:41, 8 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Added. Chiswick Chap (talk) 00:24, 9 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Meant for you to put that in the Diet section <span style="font-family:Monotype Corsiva;background:#E6E6FA;border:solid 1px;border-radius:7px;box-shadow:darkblue 0px 3px 3px;"> User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 16:52, 11 October 2018 (UTC)
 * You say all jellyfish are carnivorous and then there’s this one that’s not <span style="font-family:Monotype Corsiva;background:#E6E6FA;border:solid 1px;border-radius:7px;box-shadow:darkblue 0px 3px 3px;"> User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 18:48, 11 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Mastigias eats plankton, so it's not an exception.
 * Being omnivorous, the statement “jellyfish are carnivorous,” implying all are, is false <span style="font-family:Monotype Corsiva;background:#E6E6FA;border:solid 1px;border-radius:7px;box-shadow:darkblue 0px 3px 3px;"> User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 01:35, 12 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Well an impeccable source boldly uses "All", actually. The point is that the stinging cells paralyse or kill wriggly animals, which are their prey. Chiswick Chap (talk) 08:27, 12 October 2018 (UTC)
 * In any case you need to bring up that there is an omnivorous jellyfish because it is notable and related to Diet <span style="font-family:Monotype Corsiva;background:#E6E6FA;border:solid 1px;border-radius:7px;box-shadow:darkblue 0px 3px 3px;"> User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 13:32, 12 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Mentioned in Diet section. Chiswick Chap (talk) 13:42, 12 October 2018 (UTC)
 * spotted jellyfish from jellyfish lake in a symbiotic relationship with some algae <span style="font-family:Monotype Corsiva;background:#E6E6FA;border:solid 1px;border-radius:7px;box-shadow:darkblue 0px 3px 3px;"> User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 14:58, 12 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Oh is that what you wanted. Added to Diet section.
 * Oh is that what you wanted. Added to Diet section.


 * Sorry I’m going so slow <span style="font-family:Monotype Corsiva;background:#E6E6FA;border:solid 1px;border-radius:7px;box-shadow:darkblue 0px 3px 3px;"> User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 16:52, 11 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Not a problem.


 * ”Jellyfish medusae” seems redundant <span style="font-family:Monotype Corsiva;background:#E6E6FA;border:solid 1px;border-radius:7px;box-shadow:darkblue 0px 3px 3px;"> User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 16:52, 11 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Fixed.


 * Why did you specifically mention the blue swimmer crab? <span style="font-family:Monotype Corsiva;background:#E6E6FA;border:solid 1px;border-radius:7px;box-shadow:darkblue 0px 3px 3px;"> User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 16:52, 11 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Cut.


 * ”Not only do they eat fish eggs and juvenile fish, but they also compete for food resources...” these two statements are not related <span style="font-family:Monotype Corsiva;background:#E6E6FA;border:solid 1px;border-radius:7px;box-shadow:darkblue 0px 3px 3px;"> User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 16:52, 11 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Rearranged paragraph. The connection is that jellyfish prevent fish stocks from recovering, by eating their young and competing for food, so once fish numbers go down, they won't come back up. Hope that's clear now.


 * ”...leading to jellyfish having a difficult-to-reverse dominant position” I don’t know what this means <span style="font-family:Monotype Corsiva;background:#E6E6FA;border:solid 1px;border-radius:7px;box-shadow:darkblue 0px 3px 3px;"> User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 16:52, 11 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Reworded.


 * What do the circles mean on the map? <span style="font-family:Monotype Corsiva;background:#E6E6FA;border:solid 1px;border-radius:7px;box-shadow:darkblue 0px 3px 3px;"> User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 16:52, 11 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Data records; larger circles mean those with higher certainty. Added to legend.


 * ”Invasive populations can expand rapidly because they often face no predators in the new habitat,” has no ref <span style="font-family:Monotype Corsiva;background:#E6E6FA;border:solid 1px;border-radius:7px;box-shadow:darkblue 0px 3px 3px;"> User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 16:52, 11 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Cut.


 * there seems to be a lot of overlap between the Blooms section and the following sections <span style="font-family:Monotype Corsiva;background:#E6E6FA;border:solid 1px;border-radius:7px;box-shadow:darkblue 0px 3px 3px;"> User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 16:52, 11 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Cut down repeat mentions of blooming; merged Population, Jelly-fall, Dead zone sections into Blooms.


 * You should talk about Jellyfish Lake all at once instead of in two different paragraphs <span style="font-family:Monotype Corsiva;background:#E6E6FA;border:solid 1px;border-radius:7px;box-shadow:darkblue 0px 3px 3px;"> User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 16:52, 11 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Fixed.


 * Why is Jellyfish Master in italics? <span style="font-family:Monotype Corsiva;background:#E6E6FA;border:solid 1px;border-radius:7px;box-shadow:darkblue 0px 3px 3px;"> User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 16:52, 11 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Fixed.


 * What exactly is the picture in Biotechnology of? The description just says it’s a protein registered with 1ema code <span style="font-family:Monotype Corsiva;background:#E6E6FA;border:solid 1px;border-radius:7px;box-shadow:darkblue 0px 3px 3px;"> User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 16:52, 11 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Above the file description is a section called SCOP Lineage, which says it's Green Fluorescent Protein, as the caption already says.


 * ”...typically in circular tanks to avoid trapping specimens in corners, as in the Monterey Bay Aquarium,” that sounds like Monterey Bay traps jellyfish in corners <span style="font-family:Monotype Corsiva;background:#E6E6FA;border:solid 1px;border-radius:7px;box-shadow:darkblue 0px 3px 3px;"> User:Dunkleosteus77 &#124;push to talk 16:52, 11 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Fixed.